The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this argument from the vice president of a food distribution company, the aithor claims that the company discovered over $20000 worth of food at warehouse in Palm City had been destroyed by pest damage, but the other warehouse in Winterbale only $10000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Moreover, the author suggests that they should return to the Buzzoff Pest Control company for all their pest control services. However we need more evidence about these issue.
The author states that they discovered over $20000 worth of food at warehouse in Palm City which had been destroyed by pest damage, but the other warehouse just lost only $10000 worth of the food. However, we need to know whether these two warehouse have the same environment to store food. What if the warehouse in Palm City has more dangerous situation than the warehouse in Winterbale? For example, if there is more pests live in there than in Wintervale, it is possible that the former lost more food than the latter.
Even if the warehouse in Palm City lost more food than in Wintervale, that is not to say the Fly-Aeay Control Company is worse than Buzzoff. Is it highly possible that the warehouse in Palm City is bigger than in Wintervale. For instance, If the scale of the warehouse in Palm City is twice than in Wintervale. It can be true that the warehouse in Palm City would lose more food than in Wintervale.
The author suggests that the company should return to Buzzoff for all their pest control services. Still, we need more evidence about this issue. Notwithstanding the warehouse in Wintervale lost less food, it cannot represent every warehouse in other places. Not all the places are same environment, even though the price charged by Fly-Away is lower.
To sum up, The author would need to provide more evidence to make valid of these issues he mentioned.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1516 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.679 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.381 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.63 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.21 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ny for all their pest control services. However we need more evidence about these issue...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are more pests'?
Suggestion: there are more pests
...arehouse in Winterbale? For example, if there is more pests live in there than in Wintervale, it is...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, still, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83024691358 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48559904989 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398148148148 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0241573401 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8125 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256864663666 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920713614797 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670300265627 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154608925391 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094120329774 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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