The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing. "During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter

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The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing. "During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument states that the vice president of Quiot Manufacturing reports a 30% more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries plant in which works shifts are one hour shorter. Additionally, the vice presidents indicates that factors in on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers; therefore, a shorter shift is needed to be carried out. This suggestion makes a logical sense at first glance, however, upon closer examination, there are some flaws needed to be warranted to strengthen its suggestion. I shall explore in the following essay.

First, the vice president asserts that they have 30% accidents more than Panoply Industries plant where workers’ shifts are shorter. However, the statistic remains specious since we don’t know the actual number of reported accidents. A comparable higher percentage seems to be inadequate to assume that there are a lot of accidents happened. For example, what if last year there were 3 accidents happened at Quiot Manufacturing whereas only 1 happened at Panoply Industries plant? These numbers look trivial compared to the seemingly exaggerated percentage. Consequently, only by comparing the actual number of accidents can we realize the seriousness of the situation and therefore the suggestion is enhanced.

Secondly, the vice president seems to assume that all the accidents reported are resulted from exhausted workers. The statistic states that there are 30% more accidents happened yet it fails to offer details about what has attributed to these accidents. For example, an explosion may happen due to malfunctioned machine and electrical facilities may shut down due to excess usage of electricity at once. None of these accidents are outcomes because of tired workers and the vice president should include this situation into consideration. Thus, without further details provided by the statistic, we cannot guarantee the fatigue workers is the main reasons of on-the-job accidents.

Moreover, even though all the assumption mentioned above turn out to be valid, the argument fails to provide correlation between effectiveness and shorter shifts. Does a shorter shifts really give workers more time to rest and therefore they can contribute effectiveness? What if workers don’t need want that much time to rest and they want more working hours in order to earn more money? Would the shorter shifts discourage such workers and they eventually lose interests in working because working overtime to make money isn’t viable anymore? We don’t know that.

To sum up, even though it is reasonable to shorten shifts and provide workers with more resting time. There are some flaws needed to be justified in order to support the suggestion, that is: the actual number of accidents reported, the validity of the reported accidents and its causes as well as the correlation between shorter shifts and effectiveness.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for example, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50110864745 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91188822298 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514412416851 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 772.2 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9191812731 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.772727273 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.36363636364 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322891014975 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929651971129 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125301068687 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182475576599 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105648986413 0.0628817314937 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2388 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.248 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.805 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.682 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.412 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.513 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5