The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The memo from the vice presidents suggests that the in order to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at quiot manufacturing and thereby increase productivity, they must reduce the work shifts by an hour. this recommendation is entrenched on the premise that experts say that fatigue and sleep deprivation among works are factors directly propotional to the quantity of on-th-job accidents. Further, the memo also cites that quiot manufacturing has 30 percent more such accidents as compared to panoply industries where the work shift is one hour shorter than ouiot Manudacturing. However, before any serious action is taken based on the memo, we need to evaluate the following three unstated assumptions.
First, the vice president assumes that the number of employees are roughly comparable at ouiot manufacturing as compared to panoply industries. Maybe the ouiot manufacturing has 10 times the number of employees as in panoply industries and a larger manufacturing plant. consequently, it would be prudent to assume that although there are more number of on-the-job accidents at ouiot manufacturing, the total number of accidents per employee is far less than expected. this would mean that the quiot manufacturing is outperforming panoply industries w.r.t the number of errors per employee and what may apply at panoply industries may not apply at quiot manufacturing.
Second, the vice president assumes that the underlying tecnologies -- including machineries and equipments -- at ouiot manufacturing is comparable to panoply industries. it may be possible that panoply industries may be using more advanced equipments designed to avoid on-the-job accidents. it may also be possible that the machines at quiot manufacturing are old and in a dilapidated condition making them more suseciptable to human errors. consequently, if any of the above situations are true then the vice president's argument holds not water.
Last but not the least, the vice president assumes that the quality and education of employees at ouiot manufacturing is simliar to that of panoply industries. perhaps the employees at panoply industries have higher skill and education than those at ouiot manufacturing - perhaps because of the higher pay at panoply industries. it may also be possible that panoply industries is spending significantly larger quantities of their revenue in educating their employees thereby reducing the on-the-job errors. Accordingly, if the above assumptions holds true, the vice presidents solution shall bear little fruit.
In conclusion, the seemingly cogent argument as it stands now, is considerably flawed because of its reliance on several unwaranted assumptions. but if the vice president is able to provide substantial resaons to cross out the unwarranted assumptions (perhaps in the form of systematic research study), we may be able to exhaustively evaluate the viability of the aforementioned recommendation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2442 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.463 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.188 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 89 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.02 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.397 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: This
...must reduce the work shifts by an hour. this recommendation is entrenched on the pre...
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Line 4, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oughly comparable at ouiot manufacturing as compared to panoply industries. Maybe...
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Suggestion: Consequently
...tries and a larger manufacturing plant. consequently, it would be prudent to assume that alt...
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Suggestion: This
...per employee is far less than expected. this would mean that the quiot manufacturing...
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...ng is comparable to panoply industries. it may be possible that panoply industries...
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...designed to avoid on-the-job accidents. it may also be possible that the machines ...
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Suggestion: Consequently
...them more suseciptable to human errors. consequently, if any of the above situations are tru...
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Suggestion: Perhaps
... simliar to that of panoply industries. perhaps the employees at panoply industries hav...
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...f the higher pay at panoply industries. it may also be possible that panoply indus...
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Suggestion: But
...ance on several unwaranted assumptions. but if the vice president is able to provid...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2505.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62921348315 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2518383917 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460674157303 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8044023826 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.166666667 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7222222222 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400618676163 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132655815756 0.0743258471296 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111241989814 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221568323106 0.128457276422 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132833876374 0.0628817314937 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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