The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing."During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than

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The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.

"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument attempts to bridge a relationship between working hours and numbers of on-the-job accidents. The conclusion is based on comparison with another company and experts findings. However, on deeper analysis, there are certainly important questions unanswered and facts unnoticed, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.

The vice president of Quiot Manufacturing claims that shorten work shifts by one hour lead to an adequate amount of sleep for employees. It is not known if there is a relationship between amounts of sleep and working hours per day. The vice president makes a false assumption that when employees could earlier leave their work, they also went earlier to bed. Everyone have some spare time and it is possible that employees are going to use this extra hour for other activities than sleeping.

Another reason to shortcut the work shifts is that another company, where work shifts are one our less, have 30 percent less on-the-job accidents. It could be true that there is a relationship between this but therefore more information is required. There are no numbers of the amount of employees in both companies. There is a possibility that there are much more employees in Quiot Manufacturing than in Panoply. In addition, there is not any information given about the type of work which is a very important factor in accident opportunities. Maybe jobs in Quiot Manufacturing are much more physical related.

Experts research tells us that there is a relationship between fatigue and sleep deprivation related to accidents. This seems to be very likely. However, there is missing some important information about the research. First, we don’t know anything about the type of research and the amount of participants. It is also not known in which type of work the research is based on. Exact values are unknown even as the validity. You can imagine that fatigue plays a more important role for a taxi driver than for a teacher related to on-the-job accidents.

For all of the above reasons, the vice president of Quiot Manufacturing has drawn a dubious conclusion. It may be likely that there is a relationship between sleep and on-the-job accidents but there have to be more details about the research, more information about the filling of the hour more spare time and the relation between the two businesses the vice president compared to each other. If this information is available the argument of the vice president would be more convincing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...they also went earlier to bed. Everyone have some spare time and it is possible that...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...turing are much more physical related. Experts research tells us that there is ...
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Line 9, column 5, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...related to on-the-job accidents. For all of the above reasons, the vice president of Qu...
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Line 9, column 394, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... vice president compared to each other. If this information is available the argum...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13414634146 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87107567826 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453658536585 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0467834061 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5217391304 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69565217391 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25171915792 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708877542795 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713619600664 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143474839343 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0809780673055 0.0628817314937 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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