The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quito Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quito Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quito and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The memo presented by the vice president of Quito Manufacturing is rife with fallacies and illogical arguments trying to support the conclusion. The vice president put forward a solution to abate the number of on-the-job accidents by shortening each of their three work shifts by an hour such that employees get an adequate amount of sleep but do not provide enough arguments to strengthen the conclusion.
Firstly, the memo states that Quito Manufacturing had 30 per cent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts were one hour shorter than theirs. This argument is misleading as the cause of the on-the-job accidents is considered to be the extended hour work at Quito Manufacturing. The memo fails to specify the cause of the accidents, in both of the Industrial Plants and makes a substantial-conclusion based on this argument. The vice president should take a survey of the numbers and causes of accidents daily which would provide a better understanding of the cause of the accidents.
Secondly, the memo provides a statement that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among the workers and therefore, to reduce the number of accidents and increase productivity, they should shorten each of their three work shifts by one hour such that employees should get adequate amounts of sleep. This statement provides dubious shreds of evidence to conclude. The memo fails to explain the amount of sleep a worker is getting on an average as that might give an extensive view of the issue. Also, with the reduction in the working hours, productivity will decrease as there is no correlation present in the number of accidents and productivity.
In conclusion, one can contradict that sleep is necessary and that an adequate amount of sleep can increase productivity but the facts provided in the memo are misleading and does not suffice the need of reducing the working hours. Instead of this, the vice president should look into the cause of the accidents and check whether the workers are following safety protocols or not. The illusion formed in the vice president’s mindset that the accidents are caused by sleep deprivation is incorrect and not enough facts support his conclusion.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19623655914 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00700010956 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465053763441 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.6951094699 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.692307692 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321421717487 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122313269268 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149064562889 0.0701772020484 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203795855284 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134922253065 0.0628817314937 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19623655914 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00700010956 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465053763441 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.6951094699 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.692307692 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6153846154 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321421717487 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122313269268 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149064562889 0.0701772020484 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203795855284 0.128457276422 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134922253065 0.0628817314937 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.