The following appeared in a memo at XYZ company.
"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating résumés and developing interviewing skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we use the less expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this memo, the author recommends that XYZ company should still choose Delany Personal Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating resumes and developing interviewing skill instead of Walsh Personnel Firm. To support his/her conclusion, the author points out that Laid-off employees have benefited from Delany's services. Moreover, the author presents that it would be a mistake to replace Delany's services with Walsh's services. it is convincing to claim that Delany's services are better than Walsh's services at first glance, there are some unstated assumptions, which if proved to be unwarranted, could be seriously challenged.
To start off, we are informed that people who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than people who did not use this service, then the author concludes that we should choose Delany's services rather than Walsh's services for laid-off employees. the author apparently assumed that the speed rate of finding job plays a paramount role in choosing services, but we do not know the current condition of people finding a job through Delany's service. It is of equal possibility that these laid-off employees are eager to find a job then they take an effort to show themselves and does not relate to Delany’s service, then we are inclined to believe that people who are laid off always make own decisions without the Delany’s help, so the recommendation in the argument is unconvincing.
Moreover, the author presents that only a half of worker we laid off that time find a job within a year using Walsh’s service before eight years. the author irrational assume that Walsh's service to find job always need more time than Delany's service, then further presents that it is a mistake to choose Walsh's services. Walsh's services might more slow than Delany's services before eight years ago, but at present, we do not know what is the current state of Delany's services. if Delany company have a deep revolution since we found they may be not better than other company before eight years ago. then we are unconvinced of the recommendation in this argument.
In addition, the author claims that Delany is apparently better than Walsh because of bigger staff and a large number of branch offices of Delany. then what assumption underlies this claim is that a greater company must have bigger staff and amounts of branch offices. But if it turns out to be a smaller company more effective than the abovementioned company, then the author’s assumption is seriously challenged and the recommendation is rendered unconvincing.
To sum up, while Delany’s service is better than Walsh’s at first glance, we need more information to help evaluate aforementioned assumptions. Either of these assumptions proves unconvincing, then we are inclined to believe that the recommendation in the argument is unwarranted
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2343 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.082 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.223 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.467 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.729 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.315 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 110, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...ose Delany Personal Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating resumes and deve...
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Line 1, column 440, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... Delanys services with Walshs services. it is convincing to claim that Delanys ser...
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Line 1, column 580, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...re are some unstated assumptions, which if proved to be unwarranted, could be seri...
^^
Line 2, column 248, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...Walshs services for laid-off employees. the author apparently assumed that the spee...
^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...alsh's service before eight years. the author irrational assume that Walshs se...
^^^
Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... the current state of Delanys services. if Delany company have a deep revolution s...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...n other company before eight years ago. then we are unconvinced of the recommendatio...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the recommendation in this argument. In addition, the author claims that Dela...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... than Walsh because of bigger staff and a large number of branch offices of Delany. then what ass...
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Line 4, column 149, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
...rge number of branch offices of Delany. then what assumption underlies this claim is...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, while, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24347826087 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88924738861 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452173913043 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 743.4 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5647899475 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.882352941 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0588235294 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282359594753 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116019682366 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188685603632 0.0701772020484 269% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175378680399 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.177445959964 0.0628817314937 282% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.