The following appeared in a memorandum from a dean at Omega University.
"Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors."
In the memorandum, it is claimed that omega university should now terminate student evaluation of professors to enable its graduates to secure better job which is a based on predictions that has fallacies. before coming to the conclusion, the authority must answer some questions with reliability in order to implement the best action.
Firstly, student evaluation of professors was implemented with the intention that it would bring out the best professors which would lead to better academic system. Moreover, it was implemented fifteen long years ago and it is still going on which means it must have impacted the institution and the students positively. if this is not the case, then why was this not shunned within few years of the implementation? if it is causing unemployment, then why the students are still being enrolled in this particular institution? The answers must bear credibility.
Secondly, the fact that the overall student grade averages have risen by thirty percent may not be the consequence of student evaluation of professors.As time is passing, students are becoming more conscious about their studies and eventually securing higher grades than their seniors. it is very likely that the increment in grades is the direct consequence of this fact. Another reason could be the fact that better evaluated professors are better at teaching and students are preferring their classes to attain which is leading to a better performance for the students. How much authentic is the claim that the increment in grades is due to professors approach in gaining better evaluation? The authenticity is required before claiming such fact.
Finally, a direct comparison with alpha university is inappropriate.Does omega university has similar ranking, facilities, academic structure and alumni association as alpha University? may be Alpha university is better in every sense than omega university despite being a nearby institution which is why it has more students who are securing more jobs than omega university. perhaps, there is no significance of the appear lieve of the employers that omega university is inflated. The comparison must be logical in all the senses.
In conclusion, the above mentioned facts must be evaluated with proper evidence before coming to a settlement about eradicating the unemployment problem of omega university. perhaps it is due to other facts which is affecting the students job securing capability. The authority must bring out the possible causes of the scenario for making proper evaluation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 401 350
No. of Characters: 2105 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.475 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.249 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.87 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.552 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'prediction'?
Suggestion: prediction
...o secure better job which is a based on predictions that has fallacies. before coming to th...
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Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...ased on predictions that has fallacies. before coming to the conclusion, the authority...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: If
...nstitution and the students positively. if this is not the case, then why was this...
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Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...within few years of the implementation? if it is causing unemployment, then why th...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on? The answers must bear credibility. Secondly, the fact that the overall stud...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...nce of student evaluation of professors.As time is passing, students are becoming ...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...uring higher grades than their seniors. it is very likely that the increment in gr...
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Line 5, column 476, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ors are better at teaching and students are preferring their classes to attain which is leadin...
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Suggestion: Does
... with alpha university is inappropriate.Does omega university has similar ranking, f...
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Line 8, column 91, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
... is inappropriate.Does omega university has similar ranking, facilities, academic s...
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Line 8, column 187, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
...alumni association as alpha University? may be Alpha university is better in every ...
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Line 8, column 377, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Perhaps
...curing more jobs than omega university. perhaps, there is no significance of the appear...
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Line 8, column 414, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...y. perhaps, there is no significance of the appear lieve of the employers that omega unive...
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Line 11, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...employment problem of omega university. perhaps it is due to other facts which is affec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41604010025 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03035192179 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483709273183 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0689902994 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.736842105 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299464660896 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827084630726 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724235388916 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157595296757 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648289771195 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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