The author claims that waac radio station should not only change music format but also adopt news and talk format popular in the area resulting in increase number of listeners. Few eevidences are promulgated by author regarding claim. However, deliberate analysis must be made to cohesively accept argument to be legit.
Firstly, the auhtor claims that waac should change rock music format as number of listeners are declining. Perhaps, there might be chances of listeners moving to different areas and more new people coming in and not being aware of waac radio station. Also, another possibility would be listeners listening to rock music on different gadgets such as mobile phones, computer or through television. The auhtor must provide evidences regarding the decrement of listeners was due to rock music and not any other factor.
Secondly, the author claims that many retirees entering their area seems to have limited interest in music, the reason being stores selling recorded music have closed. There might be a scenario where retirees would listen to music in their own music systems having more collection that they would have bought while moving in. Also, stores would have got greater profit in other areas and would have moved there. This does not necessariy mean retirees are less interested in music. The author must hence provide evidences in order to prove retirees being less interested and closing of stores. Further, some survery suggesting that people in that particular area are interested in having news and talk radio format.
In summary, the stated evidences are required to be provided by the author. Otherwise, the argument would stand unconvincing.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Few eevidences are promulgated by author regarding claim.
Error: eevidences Suggestion: evidences
Sentence: Firstly, the auhtor claims that waac should change rock music format as number of listeners are declining.
Error: auhtor Suggestion: author
Sentence: The auhtor must provide evidences regarding the decrement of listeners was due to rock music and not any other factor.
Error: auhtor Suggestion: author
Sentence: This does not necessariy mean retirees are less interested in music.
Error: necessariy Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: Further, some survery suggesting that people in that particular area are interested in having news and talk radio format.
Error: survery Suggestion: survey
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 269 350
No. of Characters: 1381 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.05 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.134 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.343 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.855 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 57, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...htor claims that waac should change rock music format as number of listeners are ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 269.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2750929368 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41872346218 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539033457249 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2125830145 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9333333333 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180586968636 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690783349749 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666607100641 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110844935332 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871426727064 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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