The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Health Naturally a small but expanding chain of stores selling health food and other health related products Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in ar | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Health
Naturally, a small but expanding chain of stores selling health food and other
health-related products.
"Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in areas
where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should
therefore build one of our new stores in Plainsville, which clearly has many such
residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise
equipment are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years
ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight-training
and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of
customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a program
called Fitness for Life, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early
age."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and
what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The memorandum states that the the vice president of Health wants to expand his chain of store in Plainville. The merchants reports which states that Painesville is a health conscious city. However the process by which the author reached in the conclusion has logical inconsistency and unjustified assumptions. Primarily, three questions must be answered before the argument can be properly evaluated.

Firstly, what is the number of the reports the merchants reported? The assumption that the reports of the merchants are can't be true as the reports doesn't tell about the number of the people and sales of running shoes or equipment won't be related to health. For instance, people buy fancy shoes and keep them for long time and don't wear them. The merchants must have bought some new designs which might have increased the sale. We might need a solid proof stating that people are buying shoes for health purpose. If that might be the case, it can be justified that reports from the merchants are true.

Secondly? Are all the cities same like other? The assumption of from previous experience that the Painesville is a high concerned with healthy lives might not be completely correct. The people might have been recently been active in summer but then winter the city might be cold everyone would change their action. Also, to make profit the people of Painesville people must invest money. If that might be the case, it can be justified by the survey by the people of the Painesville about their needs and how are the people.

Lastly, Will the children participate the program with interest? The assumption that the Painesville's children to participate in Fitness for Life will work might not be true. The children might be interested in fitness but not everyone. We can't force the decision. If that might be the case, It can be justified by taking survey on the children to strengthen the argument.

In nutshell, the vice president reached a conclusion by looking at merchants reports, comparing other cities with Plainville, and anticipating that the children might join the program. A solid proof of that assumption is lacking in the claim. More reasoning and linking of cause and effects logically could help the author making a reasonable assumption.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
The memorandum states that the the vice president of Health wants to expan...
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Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
The memorandum states that the the vice president of Health wants to expan...
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Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'report'.
Suggestion: report
...n of store in Plainville. The merchants reports which states that Painesville is a heal...
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Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...Painesville is a health conscious city. However the process by which the author reached...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...n that the reports of the merchants are cant be true as the reports doesnt tell abou...
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Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rchants are cant be true as the reports doesnt tell about the number of the people and...
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Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...y shoes and keep them for long time and dont wear them. The merchants must have boug...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...erested in fitness but not everyone. We cant force the decision. If that might be th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02652519894 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63716777448 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477453580902 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9549841214 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3913043478 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3913043478 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.099337914208 0.218282227539 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345514689986 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719177942398 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0649119430327 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622071301695 0.0628817314937 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments