The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature's Way, a
chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.
"Previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents
are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store
in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of
running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly
closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight
training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of
customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a 'fitness for life' program,
which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age."
The present argument is written by the vice president of the natures way, who recommended to open the chains of the healthy food and goods stores in the Plainville. he presented a few supporting evidences to support his recommendation, some of them are, the resident of the plainville area are highly inspired to the healthy living, there's a opening of the local health club, society conducted an aerobic and the weight gaining classes and the health related course from the early ages school child. though he gives a few positive ideas to support his idea, I'm not much convinced with his view.
Firstly, The increase in the bussiness of the running shoes and exercise good doesn't mean the resident people are also interested in buying healthy clothes or the food. so, there's not much connection between the increase in the business of the area and interest of people towards healthy food.
Secondly, the local health club opened after 5 years and there's a crowd of people over there as mentioned but there might be some occasional visitor in the club. the vice chairman doesn't mention about anything wheather all members of the club are doing a regular workout or not.
Thirdly, if people are doing regularly workout and health training, it's not necessary that they will be some healthy stuff from market. they may think if they are doing much workout and exercise there's not necessity of buying exercise clothes and healthy food.
Fourth, it's good to keep health realted course from the early age, but in school all the kids are too younger too buy the healthy stuff. Thus, it make clear that though health related course are begings from the arly age, it doesn't increse the sales in the stores of plainville.
In Sum, though vice chair person presented some evidencesto support his arguments, I'm not convinced with his idea.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1490 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.7 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.355 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.447 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.866 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ood and goods stores in the Plainville. he presented a few supporting evidences to...
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Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... highly inspired to the healthy living, theres a opening of the local health club, soc...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... inspired to the healthy living, theres a opening of the local health club, socie...
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Line 1, column 501, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...ourse from the early ages school child. though he gives a few positive ideas to suppor...
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Line 1, column 559, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...few positive ideas to support his idea, Im not much convinced with his view. Firs...
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Line 2, column 79, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... of the running shoes and exercise good doesnt mean the resident people are also inter...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... in buying healthy clothes or the food. so, theres not much connection between the...
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Line 2, column 173, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...buying healthy clothes or the food. so, theres not much connection between the increas...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...al health club opened after 5 years and theres a crowd of people over there as mention...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...be some occasional visitor in the club. the vice chairman doesnt mention about anyt...
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Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... visitor in the club. the vice chairman doesnt mention about anything wheather all mem...
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Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...will be some healthy stuff from market. they may think if they are doing much workou...
^^^^
Line 4, column 195, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...hey are doing much workout and exercise theres not necessity of buying exercise clothe...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to buy'?
Suggestion: to buy
... in school all the kids are too younger too buy the healthy stuff. Thus, it make clear ...
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Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ger too buy the healthy stuff. Thus, it make clear that though health related course...
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Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ourse are begings from the arly age, it doesnt increse the sales in the stores of plai...
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Line 6, column 84, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...some evidencesto support his arguments, Im not convinced with his idea.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 312.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.875 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36785665766 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509615384615 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.110712979 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152767609494 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611335044557 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574911520591 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071808148584 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04779183677 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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