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The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.

"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author argues that if a business desire to prosper, it should hire personnel who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. This is based on a recent study among advertising executives which mentions that the executives who are sleeping less than 6 hours per night, they have enlarged profits margins and better prospectives for career. However, on deeper analysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumtions and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the premise as an outcome of the survey that ececutives with no more 6 hours sleep per night have augmented potential for advanced salaries and prospectives for career. Though, it is possible that the sample of these ececutives may be consisted mainly by young and freshmen executives who have all the stamina and endurance to complete successfully their daily tasks even if they sleep only 6 hours at night. To render this argument more valid, the author should cite more information about the sample as the average of age of these executives. In case that the majority of these executives were elder, his/her argument would be more valid
. Moreover, the author is incorrectly based on the result of the syrvey to support his/her conclusion. However, the amount of sleeping time is not as crucila on the overall perfomance of an executive as the enhanced skills, a stong academic education and a valuable experience. It is possible that the sample of this syrvey to be consisted by prominent executives on their realm and their working perfomance could be explained due to their advanced skills and not by the amount of sleeping hours. To overcome this flaw, the author should mention more information about the qualities of this sample as their academic education and working experience.
The author is also wrongly based on such a minor sample to generalize his/her argument. The sample of 300 executives in a survey hardly can be evaluated as credible especially on the realm of business management which is overcrowded and
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07712765957 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78661070486 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48670212766 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4671842902 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.357142857 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8571428571 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203130034232 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069116432843 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676035126978 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101482764856 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675521411458 0.0628817314937 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments