The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Author concluded that to have successful growth in any company they have to must hire the employees who have less tan 6 hours sleep at night and also mentioned a study that the average number of sleep per night is correlated with the prosper of their official works. But here writer has not mentioned cogent statistical data to rely on that recommendations.
Firstly, writer said that from the study he found that there is correlation between number of hours sleep and company success but he had not showed any further results so that we can ensure that if worker sleep not more than six hours then a working industry can have tremendous success. Perhaps the research is done where every worker might not sleep less than six rather it is a combination of less than six and more than six hours. Consequently, without knowing every single employee sleeping data per night we can not say if workers average sleeping hour is related with companies achievements.
Secondly, author said that id employee sleep less than six hours then company can prosper. But perhaps the worker who induced in sleep per night more than six hours have more productive in their works than the people who have sleep less than six hours dormant. So, without knowing proper experiments on both people regarding sleeping hours, we can not conclude that a company can not have success if they have the worker who are able to sleep less than six hours per night.
Thirdly, the recommender furthermore added that company should hire the people who have less hours sleep because it can prosper their economical condition o=f their company. But here author have not make any statistical experimental data to make ensure that. It might be happened that if company hire less sleeping people then company become more looser. Because less sleeping people might have some health issues and they would absent most of the moments when company needs them any urgents official meeting in projects which would destroy companies reputation and the owner of the industry would be failure in their project.
In conclusion we can say, without proper experimental data chart we should not rely on the recommended conclusion made by writer. Moreover, author should represent more clear and authentic information which would lead us to decide with his perspective. Because we can not believe any clear experimental research over this decision .
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 401 350
No. of Characters: 1966 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.475 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.432 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.641 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.408 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.223 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...r of sleep per night is correlated with the prosper of their official works. But here write...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...company should hire the people who have less hours sleep because it can prosper their econ...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...company should hire the people who have less hours sleep because it can prosper thei...
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Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'made'.
Suggestion: made
...their company. But here author have not make any statistical experimental data to ma...
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Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...at if company hire less sleeping people then company become more looser. Because les...
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Line 7, column 342, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'looser' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: looser
...ess sleeping people then company become more looser. Because less sleeping people might hav...
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Line 8, column 253, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lead us to decide with his perspective. Because we can not believe any clear experiment...
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Line 8, column 330, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...experimental research over this decision .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.015 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48508714366 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.0765758657 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.733333333 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157687155987 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657385314016 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635873384358 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105093726892 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648185260525 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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