The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The results presented in the business magazine suggest that, a business firm should hire people who require to sleep less than 6 hours in the night for it to become successful. The suggestion is based on the following three unwarranted assumptions that need to be cleared for the proposal to be justified.
First of all, the article assumes that the success of a business firm depends only on its ececutives, that is the senior employee of the company. But this might not be the case. For instance, in a soft drink manufacturing company, executives are mainly the one who organize the rules, set up work schedules for shift managers and those who are in charge of the production and others but the successful of the job depends on the efficiency of the one who do the job, who are directly involved with it. In that case, studying only the executives is not supposed to serve the actual purpose.
Secondly, the article assumes that, sleep is the only parameter that determines the success of a business farm. But what if this is not the case. For a person to be more focused, and work oriented, a number of things play a huge role, not only sleep. For example, If his/ her family life is not peaceful enough, he/she will not be able to give his best to his professional career and consequently his/her performance will degrade. Thus judging a persons success only on his sleep duration will not be a plausable process to follow.
Further, the result in the article assumes that all other business farm will follow the success trend of the advertising firms on which the study has been conducted, But it is possible that other business firms are not based on the same motto of the advertising agencies related in the study. Suppose, in an advertising firm the prosperity might depend on how much time the executives can input in the company, but for a law firm, the success depends on how efficiently it solves the clients' legal problem. Sleeping more, this case might help the lawyer to think fresh and differently. Thus the suggestion in the article does not hold water here.
In conclusion, the suggestion in the article must be backed up by these aforementioned unstated assumptions. Otherwise, the proposal might loose it's justifyability to the readers.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1821 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.634 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.625 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.118 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.191 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.302 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'sleeping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: sleeping
...ess firm should hire people who require to sleep less than 6 hours in the night for it t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ggestion is based on the following three unwarranted assumptions that need to be ...
^^
Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...erformance will degrade. Thus judging a persons success only on his sleep duration will...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 586, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... lawyer to think fresh and differently. Thus the suggestion in the article does not ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...umptions. Otherwise, the proposal might loose its justifyability to the readers.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 391.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79028132992 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71038211421 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503836317136 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.2121753824 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.176470588 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152705067375 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502495249758 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434153374106 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823026200979 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442156328155 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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