The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mention advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the given article author suggested to hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep as per result found in a study. In the study researcher analyse the relation between amount of sleep needed to executive and success of firm. The author could bring more witness about this assumption to convince the readers about the correlation between these variable.
Furthermore, the research explained that the company's profit is depend on the executives sleeping hours. How is it possible? Because everyone has their sleeping pattern and sleep is important for brain. There are many factors which inclusively decide the firm’s profit or loss such as product quality, market situation, demands, structure of firm and many more. So we cannot end that by selecting the executives who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night our firm become most successful one.
Additionally, the author talked about an advertising firm and in such firms creativity in employees is most important factor. A person has creativity but he sleeps for more than 6 hours per night than he is the proper for the firm or not? The sleep is not more important for any job only the qualities and work speaks aloud. As the work profile the employee should have personality which helps to firm more. So the given argument becomes weak at this point.
One more point, generally the science explain that when our brain needs to take rest and repair our damage nervous then our brain release dopamine hormone which make us sleep. It tells us that the sleep plays the vital role in our daily routine. It improves our daily routine work and makes us energetic. The sleeping pattern and sleeping hours depends on each person. On the basis of science we can understand that sleeping time is not important but yes it is right the employee should take proper sleep so he should be energetic during office hours.
Finally, on the basis of aforementioned discussion the argument is weaken and the researcher has to redesign the structure of research.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1637 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.773 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.441 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.43 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...h explained that the companys profit is depend on the executives sleeping hours. How i...
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Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly the qualities and work speaks aloud. As the work profile the employee should ha...
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Line 9, column 68, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
...orementioned discussion the argument is weaken and the researcher has to redesign the ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, so, then, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90670553936 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51831935189 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530612244898 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7262755929 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5789473684 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68421052632 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134153690455 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459064103283 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045582311556 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741327510626 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045803759357 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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