The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine."A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep t

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The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.

"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author relates the sleep requirement of employees with the higher profit margins and growth of businesses. while it might be true that employees requiring less than 6 hours of sleep per night contribute towards properity of businesses the above argument is rife with holes and assumptions.

The study has been based on rating of only 300 Mentian advertising executives, while the result has been generalised for all businesses. However, profit margins and growth of a business depends on market demand, business plan and many other factors which vary not only one business to another, but also from one advertising firm to the next.

Additionally, only sleep hours of the employees are considered rather than the working hours. this could mean that the given firm is overworking their employees and enabling them to get less than 6 hours of sleep per night irrespective of their sleep requirements and thus achieving higher success rates. In this scenario, if a firm which values the welfare of its employees were to hire them they wouldn't achieve the same results.

Though it might be true that employees requiring less than 6 hours of sleep per night will be able to put in more work hours than an employee requiring an average of 8 hours of sleep, the prosperity of a company does not depend merely on the number of hours of work put in.

Hence, while the authors conclusion might be true, the argument does not justify the hiring of employees based on the hours of sleep they require to ensure the prosperity of a business. Detailed survey of number of work hours, the qualifications of employees, market demand and other factors which effect businesses could strengthen the argument and support the conclusion.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, then, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96539792388 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67040611761 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498269896194 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.6143390929 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.5 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194193289516 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777263233014 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465902193892 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112089990135 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406248246294 0.0628817314937 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1406 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.848 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.598 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 92 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.465 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.472 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.798 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5