The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument stated is flawed because it assumes that all the business that will be affected by this inference are similar to the one that is surveyed upon making the assumption that firms that hire people who sleep less than 6 hours successful, completely wrong.
Every business works in a different way and the success of a business firm cannot be attributed to only one parameter like the number of hours an executive sleeps as stated. The skill of the employees, the quality of work among various other aspects are responsible for the success of a business. If a parameter like the number of hours an employee sleeps leads to the success of a business, it is not necessary that the same will hold for another business. An advertising firm will not be in trouble if their executive happens to feel sleepy occasionally due to lack of sleep but the same cannot be said about a firm that hires drivers to handle their vehicles.
The type of work in each business is different where an advertising firm can be successful even if their executives are sleep deprived as long as they are creative while making advertisements. However, the same cannot be said about a taxi firm where they require their employees to be skilled and fresh while driving the cars. The success of each of these firms is based on different parameters and their requirements cannot be put in the same basket.
The statement also assumes that all employees in all firms work for similar number of hours in the day. The number of hours an employee dedicates to his/her works can have a severe impact on the productivity of the business. An advertising firm may require their employees to work for 8-12 hours a day which gives them more free time in the day to relax. On the other hand, a taxi business may require their employees to work at irregular times throughout the day and often at night as well making their sleeping hours inconsistently long or short.
Therefore, assuming the success of a business is possible when their executives sleep for less than 6 hours while ignoring other parameters is illogical and bound to cause problems for a business and might lead to its failure.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1757 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.636 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.565 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.513 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.415 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.676 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.17 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 23, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...mpletely wrong. Every business works in a different way and the success of a business firm cann...
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Line 3, column 453, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ments cannot be put in the same basket. The statement also assumes that all empl...
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Line 4, column 106, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...for similar number of hours in the day. The number of hours an employee dedicates t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7380952381 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62427595291 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439153439153 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.547170196 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.769230769 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0769230769 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162734428276 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756483088284 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05094650124 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983297622476 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364073554409 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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