The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city s flagging economy Dillton s city council voted last year to lower the city s corporate tax rate by 15 percent at the same | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.

"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

In an article in a Dilton newspaper, it is stated that despite the establishment of factories in town, the unemployement rate of Dillton city has remain unchanged. The explanation for this argument is that new factories has been employing staff from out-of-town worker instead of Dillton residents. The author posit this claim to be plausible assuming that decreasing corporate tax and funding grants to any company will solve city's unemployement problem. The explanation seems quite plausible initially, but on the close scrutiny of the arguments and assumptions made proves the explanation to be baseless.

Initially, the unemployement rate of the Dillton city has claimed to be unchanged, but it is possible that the population of city is relatively higher than the job opening that only two factories could afford. For an instance, if there are 300,000 people in city but the two factories opening can afford 2000 people then it may seems that most of the city people are still unemployed. While it is likely to be true that the unemployement rate has been unchanged, however, the number of people that are migrated every year to dillton has not been taken into account in the argument. Furthermore, It is possible that the exemeption of corporate tax has resulted the immigration of people to the city in higher rate resulting the population to be higher than the available opprtunities.In other words, it is likely that more people will lured to city if they have to pay less from their earning.Thus, it is possible that from last year to this year, more people might have been migrated listening to the corporate tax lowering in Dilton city. If any of these reason has merit,then this explanation is seriously flawed.

Secondly, since Dalton city council has provided grant to every possible company that would move to dillton, it is possible that the factory require highly skilled worker from a specific discipline. While, the people from Dillton city might have different specialization, which has resulted the situation where factory couldnt hire the city residents. For an instance, if the factory is to produce Agriculture inputs then it will need people more from the agriculture field. But, if the city resident has very few agriculture researcher and graduates then it will cause no change to employement rates. Thus, if any of the situation has merit, then the explanation hold no water.

In conclusion, the explanation of argument, as it claims now, is seriously flawed.It is merely based on unwarrented assumptions and incomplete data and evidences. It would have been more plausible, if the argument has supplied evidence on population data, work profile of the residents and other supporting facts.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, while, in conclusion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16478555305 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9068076911 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44920993228 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.9272789482 57.8364921388 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6875 23.324526521 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253604376144 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868227013179 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077236953795 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145652111682 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868873813479 0.0628817314937 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, while, in conclusion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments