The following appeared as part of the Dean’s newsletter:
"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
The argument is made that the students of a college are made to work for 8 hours every month for 9 months for charities to produce charitable and well-rounded members of the society, without getting paid. This statement lacks encouragement. By showing them simplistic society driven words it is asking each student to work for 72 hours of their academic year without being paid. This would help the charity socities way more than the students gaining experience and making only one party beneficial in this task. The dean should have alloted specific credits that would make the students more enthusiastic and deterministic to work.
It is also not clear that how many local charities are present in the city. For example, usually local charities are from 4 to 5 in a ciy and the number of students in the college, adding both the undergraduate and graduate students is more than 5 thousand. If every student does 8 hours every month, i.e. 40,000 hours of work from that specific college only plus the staff working there for their livelihood. The charity groups do not require this much amount of work force to make their organizations work. This may only only lead to wastage of the energy's of the students.
A better idea would be to make a student society in the college and make it an extra curricular activity for the students to work in different charitable organizations. To make the students join it, the dean must lure them with extra credits that may add up to their main degree. This will attract the interested and working students while the students who are not interested would be utilizing that time to do some other productive work.
So in this way the societys can get their work done by utilizing the best of the students with good efficiency and students will also work with zeal rather than forcefully without any benfits for them.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1511 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.707 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.521 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.787 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.548 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...xample, usually local charities are from 4 to 5 in a ciy and the number of studen...
^^
Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: only
...make their organizations work. This may only only lead to wastage of the energys of the s...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79127725857 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56383075348 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498442367601 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0031756572 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0654947346034 0.218282227539 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270691781843 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293010357754 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0452422013951 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201880449697 0.0628817314937 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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