The following appeared as a recommendation by a committee planning a tenyear budget for the city of Calatrava. "The birthrate in our city is declining: in fact, last year's birthrate was only onehalf that of five years ago. Thus the number of students enrolled in our public schools will soon decrease dramatically, and we can safely reduce the funds budgeted for education during the next decade. At the same time, we can reduce funding for athletic playing fields and other recreational facilities. As a result, we will have sufficient money to fund city facilities and programs used primarily by adults, since we can expect the adult population of the city to increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument could be summarized as 10 year budject committee expect financial savaing result from decrease the number or birth and young people significantly that is consuming certain money resources of Calatrava city. Then this expected save of money would be invested in improving the adults facilities of the city. This recommendation validation could be investigation through a set of evidences.
For instance, the committee should provide clear evidences about the expected rate of birth during the next ten years, which are the number of years that is considered in that budject estimation. Perhaps last year birth rate of Calatrava city city was very much less than the preceeding birth rate of the previous years, which is not more likely to exist during the next coming ten years, which is a long period to forecast of such significant information which a logical strong evidence. Thus, this evidence about the predicted birth rate of the next coming ten years would be a strong evidence that would bolster the committee recommendation if proven.
Furthermore, the committee need to provide enough information about the predicted financial resource that would be available among the ten years of the budjet estimation. Maybe some expected disasters or a taken risk business would shorten the availability of the financial resources or lead to reallocate of that financial resources to a certain field rather than adult facilities services. Consequently, such unconditionaly certainity evidence is an important evidence in order to endorse the addressed recommendation of the argument.
In addition, it should be guaranteed that adults facilities in Calatrava city are in real need of improvement. Perhaps the already exist adults facilities in the city are of a high level of development and already satisfied a wide vast range of the adult population of the people of Calatrava city. Therefore, any further investiments in this field is not logic as it maybe another facilities that are in real need of such urgent improvement. Then, the intended recommmendation of the argue would be weaken.
Moreovre, the committee need to provide an investigation that warranty that the next ten years will not be challenged by any uncurrently existing problems as a result of this dramatically decrease of number of birth in the city that lead to decrease in population in the future. Then the committee ought to save more money in order to take proper precautions to prevent or solve such expected problems.
These prviously illustrated evidences are a sample of set of evidences that is needed in order to properly investigate that arguments recommendation validation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument could be summarized as 10 year budject committee expect financial savaing result from decrease the number or birth and young people significantly that is consuming certain money resources of Calatrava city.
Error: budject Suggestion: budget
Error: savaing Suggestion: saving
Sentence: For instance, the committee should provide clear evidences about the expected rate of birth during the next ten years, which are the number of years that is considered in that budject estimation.
Error: budject Suggestion: budget
Sentence: Perhaps last year birth rate of Calatrava city city was very much less than the preceeding birth rate of the previous years, which is not more likely to exist during the next coming ten years, which is a long period to forecast of such significant information which a logical strong evidence.
Error: preceeding Suggestion: proceeding
Sentence: Furthermore, the committee need to provide enough information about the predicted financial resource that would be available among the ten years of the budjet estimation.
Error: budjet Suggestion: budget
Sentence: Consequently, such unconditionaly certainity evidence is an important evidence in order to endorse the addressed recommendation of the argument.
Error: certainity Suggestion: certainty
Error: unconditionaly Suggestion: unconditional
Sentence: Therefore, any further investiments in this field is not logic as it maybe another facilities that are in real need of such urgent improvement.
Error: investiments Suggestion: investments
Sentence: Then, the intended recommmendation of the argue would be weaken.
Error: recommmendation Suggestion: recommendation
Sentence: Moreovre, the committee need to provide an investigation that warranty that the next ten years will not be challenged by any uncurrently existing problems as a result of this dramatically decrease of number of birth in the city that lead to decrease in population in the future.
Error: uncurrently Suggestion: currently
Sentence: These prviously illustrated evidences are a sample of set of evidences that is needed in order to properly investigate that arguments recommendation validation.
Error: prviously Suggestion: previously
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2213 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.207 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.992 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.107 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.65 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g people significantly that is consuming certain money resources of Calatrava cit...
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Line 2, column 238, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: city
...rhaps last year birth rate of Calatrava city city was very much less than the preceeding ...
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Line 4, column 481, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
.... Then, the intended recommmendation of the argue would be weaken. Moreovre, the committ...
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Line 6, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se prviously illustrated evidences are a sample of set of evidences that is neede...
^^
Line 6, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...d in order to properly investigate that arguments recommendation validation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2254.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30352941176 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05012337376 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421176470588 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1592419504 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.875 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5625 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145014761918 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507208620891 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418835499521 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0741013763033 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398943733012 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.