The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions Since they were declared a wildl | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."

The argument stated in the West Lansburg News requests the council to prevent the construction of a road along the coastal wetlands. It reasons that a similar action taken up in a neighbouring place caused the species population of that region to decline. However, this argument has been made based on a few widely unstated assumptions.

To begin with, the author of the letter assumes that the sanctuary is Eatern Carpenteria is comparable to that of West Lansburg. There are few questions to be addressed here. On what basis is the sanctuary at East Carpenteria 'similar' to the one in West Lansburg? Is the environment of the region similar to that of the coastal wetlands of Lansburg? And , on what grounds can we compare the survival chances of a tufted groundhog to that of a sea otter? Probably, sea otters have a different set of factors that their survival relies on (as compared to the groundhogs). Further, the habitat of the sea otters discussed here is a backwater and not a coastal wetland and hence had different ramifications. If the above were true, the argument proposed fails to hold water.

Another assumption made is that the population decline of sea otters in Easter Carpenteria was solely due to the repeal of the sanctuary status in 1978. Is the author confident that there were no other factors or probably a natural calamity that took place that year causing the decline? What if there was a drought in the region that year which led to the water levels in the region to drop significantly resulting in a massive increase in the deaths of the water creatures such as the sea otters themselves. Or probably mass hunting of the otters by the residents of Carpenteria owing to their dislike of the creature could be another reason for the decline in numbers. If this were to be true, the author has failed to consider other factors in making his conclusion that the repeal of sanctuary status was the only reason for the sea otters' decline.

Further the author assumes that the tufted groundhog which once numbered in millions as per the ancient records is of a low count today. We have been provided with no such information on the present day counts of the tufted groundhog. What if the present population of the this creature has increased to such an extent that they have begun penetrating into the residential areas of Lansburg causing a nuisance to the people there. In such a scenario, rather than preserving their habitat , the council must deliberate on how to curb the increasing count so as to maintain the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy and peaceful environment. The construction of a road along the sanctuary could rather aggrandize tehe influx of the groundhog into the residential zones. Hence, the reasonin put forth by the author to maintain the regions biodiversity needs more consideration.

In conclusion, the author of the letter must reconsider his stand and provide answers to the three assumptions pointed out
above

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...of the coastal wetlands of Lansburg? And , on what grounds can we compare the surv...
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Suggestion: the; this
...dhog. What if the present population of the this creature has increased to such an exten...
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...io, rather than preserving their habitat , the council must deliberate on how to c...
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...ate on how to curb the increasing count so as to maintain the regions biodiversity and e...
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Line 7, column 577, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
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... increasing count so as to maintain the regions biodiversity and ensure a healthy and p...
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...ndhog into the residential zones. Hence, the reasonin put forth by the author to ...
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Suggestion: regions'; region's
...put forth by the author to maintain the regions biodiversity needs more consideration....
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... maintain the regions biodiversity needs more consideration. In conclusion, th...
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...ers to the three assumptions pointed out above
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, as to, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 55.5748502994 144% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2477.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.895256917 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77151023587 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448616600791 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5550192003 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.695652174 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95652173913 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200019078182 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587144649979 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682099997289 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982648243449 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670502645405 0.0628817314937 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, as to, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments