The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument claims that the autonomy of any country is based on the strengths of its borders. stated in this way, the argument manipulates the facts and conveys a distorted view of the situation that if the number of immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, the country's economy and national identity is endangered. it reveals the examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminologies. The argument simply fails to mention the key factors on the basis of which the autonomy of any country is evaluated.
Firstly, the argument readily assumes that the only reason to judge a country's autonomy is based on the strength of its borders. it stretches the evaluation on the basis of no-check on the illegal immigrants entering a country and posing a threat to economy and national identity. clearly, there is no other criteria which is highlighted for strengthening the country's autonomy. For example, not just the illegal immigrants are the targets, also the corruption within the country is a serious threat to the autonomy which needs a check. also, there is no proof that states entry of illegal immigrants is permitted in any country. it simply fails to ignore the facts of security and safety measures every country nowadays imposes to ensure that the country is in safe hands. The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that how these immigrants are not checked and how these immigrants are harming the national identity even if they enter the country.
Second, the argument claims that illegal immigrants pose threats and thus, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin. this is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between threats and the immigrant return. To illustrate, there is no example strengthening the fact that how these immigrants are imposing any harm to the country or its natives or its autonomy. While these immigrants may also be a reason to establish positive relations among nations or bring diversity between any two countries, however these notions in the given argument do not have any clear or firm base to prove the idea of threat. if the argument had provided any evidence that supported the reasons for threat to country, then it would have been a lot more convincing.
Finally, reading the argument arises many questions in the mind of the reader about the various allegations made for the immigrants and stating clear reasons as to why these immigrants are stated illegal, why no checks are made before their entry in the country and how do they impose any threat to the economy and national identity? Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In the conclusion, the argument is flawed for above mentioned reasons and therefore, unconvincing. it could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts. In order to assess the merits of a certain situation, it is essential to have a complete knowledge of all the contributing factors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 522 350
No. of Characters: 2584 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.78 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.95 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 199 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 162 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.45 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.688 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Stated
... based on the strengths of its borders. stated in this way, the argument manipulates t...
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Line 1, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...my and national identity is endangered. it reveals the examples of leap of faith, ...
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Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s based on the strength of its borders. it stretches the evaluation on the basis o...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Clearly
...hreat to economy and national identity. clearly, there is no other criteria which is hi...
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Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...at to the autonomy which needs a check. also, there is no proof that states entry of...
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Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...immigrants is permitted in any country. it simply fails to ignore the facts of sec...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...return them to their country of origin. this is again a very weak and unsupported cl...
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Line 5, column 685, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... firm base to prove the idea of threat. if the argument had provided any evidence ...
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Line 9, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ed reasons and therefore, unconvincing. it could be considerably strengthened if t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2633.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 522.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04406130268 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75874374459 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450191570881 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 835.2 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6704544232 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.380952381 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391354066696 0.218282227539 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129666712215 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1125983018 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23069677292 0.128457276422 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141101184726 0.0628817314937 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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