The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
According to the newspaper editorial, the author has claimed that in order to protect the autonomy of the country, every efforts must be made to depart them to their own country where they actually belonged. This conclusion might be true and effective but the assumptions by which conclusions are drawn, are flawed. He has assumed that strength of borders which is the major factor of country's autonomy, as said by him, has been weakened by illegal immigrants who had imposed threats on it's country and national identity. Due to lack of enough evidences related to immigrants and the factor causing economic and national threats, his conclusion is just a prompt hasty decision resulting from his flawed assumptions which are described below.
Firstly, author has not implied any facts and figures about number of illegal immigrants. Just it is like a speculation on this very important decision of country's autonomy. There might no be any illegal immigrants. They might be all legal. Without any prior study on the facts and figures of the illegal immigrants, simply just carrying out such a huge efforts to return them to their country of origin, is just a waste of time and resources. So, at first of all , survey on the number, possibility and status of illegal immigrants, should be found out very cautiously and accordingly, programmes on the departure of those illegal immigrants can be carried out.
Secondly, author has assumed that threats on economy and national identity is due to illegal immigrants. There is no sufficient information and facts specifying the types of threats by illegal immigrants on these matters. He had just hypothesized these threats are the outcome of illegal immigrants. Might be there are illegal immigrants, but they are not threats, infact, they can be the boon for the country. Most of the immigrants might be the skilll or brain drain from the economically deprived country. They might have come to this land due to lack of opportunities in their own home country. Indirectly, instead of hampering in the national and economic scenario, they might be assisting the country positively. So, research on these aspects are very important, prior to launching any sorts of efforts to make them depart from the country.
Thirdly, author implies those threats cannot be due to other reasons which might have been left from author's speculation, but very important in respect to country's autonomy. For example; illegal trading of drugs and medicines by even nationals and other illegal activities by nationals in the border and so on might be also fluctuating it's economy and national identity. So, it should be very carefully scrutinized about all the possible factors which might be leading to the threats to national and economic aspects of the country, instead of just speculating on one of the possible reason.
In these different ways, it is proved that author's conclusion might be correct, but his assumptions are flawed which rests on just a few evidences. Only these evidences are not so strong to lead to conclusion about the need to make effort to make the illegal immigrants to depart from the country.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 519 350
No. of Characters: 2577 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.773 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.965 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.695 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 503, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o had imposed threats on its country and national identity. Due to lack of enough...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ision of countrys autonomy. There might no be any illegal immigrants. They might b...
^^
Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effort'?
Suggestion: effort
...s, simply just carrying out such a huge efforts to return them to their country of orig...
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Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... time and resources. So, at first of all , survey on the number, possibility and s...
^^
Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...spect to countrys autonomy. For example; illegal trading of drugs and medicines b...
^^
Line 7, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ies by nationals in the border and so on might be also fluctuating its economy an...
^^
Line 9, column 299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... immigrants to depart from the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2637.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 519.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08092485549 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74039203778 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416184971098 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 814.5 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0765741828 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.652173913 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5652173913 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286004276827 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943498289981 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611864759857 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171456333194 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534777125955 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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