The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
The author of the given argument conclude that, illegal immigrants pose threats and they must be return to their country of origin. In order to bolster his conclusion, the author included some evidence but these evidences are not enough to bolster his argument completely. So, in order to bolster his argument, the author must include the following evidences which are explained below.
Firstly, the author assumes that if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country arenot checked than it will cause its economy and national identity in endangered position. But in order to bolster his assumption he doesnot provide the facts. There might also be possibility that the entering of the immigrants result in the increase in the economy of the country. IIf there is scarcity of the labour in different industries and factories than it might help to bolster the country economy through meeeting the labour requirement of the country in variou sectors. So, the author must in include the evidence how it will cause the national economy and identity in endagered position.
Secondly, the author assumes that the immigrants poses the threats to endangered the economy and national identity, but, fail to include the types of threat that might happen and result effect. So ,in order to bolster his argument author should clearly mention the various threats that might occurs. For example, the increase in the immigrant may result the unemployment rate in the country , or they may involve in the various criminal activities like bank robbery, mudering, terrorist attack, etc. So to bolster his argument the author must includes the various threats that might cause the endangered of economy and national identity.
Thirdly, the author assumes that in order to return the immigrant to their country every effort must be made, but, he fails to explain those effort properly that make the argument unclear. In order to bolster his argument, the efforts such as strict boder securiy, catching them and left out of the counry boder, etc. that might be effective must be included.
To the sum, the author must include these above mentioned evidences in order to bolster his argument clearly
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1789 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.421 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.781 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.466 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.661 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.213 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 197, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... that might happen and result effect. So ,in order to bolster his argument author ...
^^
Line 9, column 391, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ult the unemployment rate in the country , or they may involve in the various crim...
^^
Line 13, column 136, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this effort' or 'those efforts'?
Suggestion: this effort; those efforts
... must be made, but, he fails to explain those effort properly that make the argument unclear...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1848.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 356.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19101123596 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48960837245 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424157303371 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7977660576 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.5 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.875 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190688388131 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0798868867156 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878229224612 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110926979988 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891980259651 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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