The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 613 350
No. of Characters: 3143 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.976 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.127 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 222 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 170 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 130 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.705 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...datory for all the high schools students , since by doing so they will be able to ...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ent and certainly warrants a review. the argument states that if the stundents t...
^^^
Line 3, column 339, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...salaries. The argument does not clearly mentions that programmers who are working in hig...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 538, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
...e getting good salaries actually learnt coding in their universities only when they we...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had given'?
Suggestion: had given
...mputer science program. If the argument would have given any relevant connection about high payi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 555, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...sports, there are a lot of careers like an marine and a poet does not to know any ...
^^
Line 7, column 433, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...here is any corelation between learning programming in high school and getting good jobs. I...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 512, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
...good jobs. It is very much possble that a children are not fundamentally sound when they l...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 567, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...not fundamentally sound when they learn programming in their high school because certainly ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 925, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...e the students are quite young to learn programming in their high school and the argument d...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, e.g., first, however, if, second, so, still, then, third, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 28.8173652695 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3201.0 2260.96107784 142% => OK
No of words: 613.0 441.139720559 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22185970636 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97582523872 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67009647133 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.384991843393 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 924.3 705.55239521 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.3518603122 57.8364921388 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.05 119.503703932 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.65 23.324526521 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34229071796 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133822241743 0.0743258471296 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843913711 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243071086714 0.128457276422 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251034393189 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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