The recommendation from a group of Alumni to the art department of Linford college states that the graduates attending an internship are putative to get better job opportunities. Therefore, requesting the art department of the college to arrange an internship with the skyway designs before graduation. Based on the evidences that the skyway designs are offering internships to all departments with flexible working hours and being the best in the city for overall 80% of the designs implemented, the alumni group suggests an internship program for the future of their college's graduates. However, there is little evidence for the fact that the job placement is assured based on certain flaws in the recommendation.
First in the order, the departments of the college and the professional portfolios in the skyway designs may or may not coincide. There is an inaccurate information provided on whether design oriented internship will be compatible for all the departments of the Linford College. Perhaps, there may be a department that require programming oriented approach. How about the various subjects offered in the college and the internship articulated to all the departments? There is no specific data about the syllabus or the portion that the students are going to acquire through this internship program. If the following questions are unanswered, then the internship program may not be beneficial to all the students.
Additionally, the flexible working hours for students offered by the design company may coincide with the student's academic hours. There is no proper evidence about the formal way in which the internship is offered. For instance, may be they offer few online courses with live streaming sessions that clashes with the reporting hours in the college. Although, they offered asynchronous platform for students, there is no assurance if students will be able to grasp the design concepts like they do in face to face hands on experience at the organization.
Furthermore, Skyway designs may be a major business giant in the field of designing for the city, but there is no proper evidence for the facilities they offer to internship level graduates. Is there any training facility available for the students? If there is no proper allocation and accommodation for the students in the company, the students are likely to attend the internship glibly just to secure a certificate.
To conclude, if there is a proper statistical report for the placed candidates in jobs after graduation and the criteria mentioned about the students been selected for internship, then there must be strength to the recommendation. Otherwise, the program offered for the students will be unsuccessful in securing a job opportunity after graduation.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2281 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.22 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.954 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.885 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.36 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...he internship is offered. For instance, may be they offer few online courses with live...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, then, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2323.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31578947368 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05754393257 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446224256293 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6354783976 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.263157895 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103723393574 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0422226657427 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583612023381 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0650197392246 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639534793076 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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