The argument of the parent in the letter to the principal of Kensington Academy is reasonable but also equally flawed. The request to supercede Swift Nutrition with another vendor cannot be executed until the various loopholes in the argument are properly addressed. The opinions given by the parent is not proved to be true, for various reasons which are discussed below.
Firstly, there is a generalized statement provided based on the opinions of just few students, which is not appreciable. The parent had mentioned that his son and his friends had complained about the food, but no evidence that all the other students complained about. It could be the case that probably the food might not be appealing to him and his friends only. Furthermore, Swift Nutrition has taken the management of cafeteria an year back. But the students had complained yesterday. It is skeptical to understand that, how could the food be lacking flavor just within a day, when it was palatable for a complete year.
Secondly, the student had complained only about lunch options. When the same cafeteria is serving all times of the day, how could just meals be tasteless or not enjoyable?. Furthermore, no valid data regarding the kinds of meals supplied and the feedback of other students was mentioned to assert the parents claim. It could also be the case that certain kinds of meals might not be much tastier than others, and the student might have only tasted the former ones. Thereby the student might have come to an partisan analysis of the complete cafeteria.
Thirdly, the statement that hiring Swift resulted in students bringing their own less healthy food is a complete fallacy. Several other factors might have caused the students to bring their own food, probably students might have been interested in eating home made food, or they might not be ready to pay for the costs of food at Cafeteria. Moreover, no evidence was presented or no student data was mentioned, asserting that students are bringing less healthy foods. Predicting the health consequences of students without proper understanding of the cafeteria food is reprehensible.
Finally, to decide over the problem of replacing Swift Nutrition with another vendor, proper analysis on the arguments needs to be conducted. When a company was preferred by the management for cafeteria because of its efforts in health consciousness. One cannot simply replace its position based on some improper arguments. The various flaws mentioned above must be properly reasoned and justified, only then can the decision could be taken forward.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2117 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.005 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.227 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.795 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...in the argument are properly addressed. The opinions given by the parent is not pro...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s reasons which are discussed below. Firstly, there is a generalized statemen...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...n has taken the management of cafeteria an year back. But the students had complai...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t was palatable for a complete year. Secondly, the student had complained onl...
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Line 5, column 511, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... Thereby the student might have come to an partisan analysis of the complete cafet...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... analysis of the complete cafeteria. Thirdly, the statement that hiring Swift...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the cafeteria food is reprehensible. Finally, to decide over the problem of r...
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Line 9, column 242, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...feteria because of its efforts in health consciousness. One cannot simply replace...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14184397163 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68848484307 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479905437352 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.87941812 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8636363636 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14316160347 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504473576819 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393023558734 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868612915428 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163833508436 0.0628817314937 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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