The passage concludes that butter should be replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants, as customers do not have any issues in using margarine in place of butter. While at first reading the argument seems quite conceivable, a closer look spells out a number of assumptions that could undermine its assessment.
Firstly, it is mentioned in the memorandum that butter replacement has been done in the southwestern United States. According to the manager the experiment is successful as there are very less complaints made by customers. Maybe this change is accepted by the people of southwestern region but it does not mean that same change will be successful in other parts of United States too. There are chances that replacement may not be accepted by people; thus, this idea will not work with efficacy. Therefore, before permanently replacing butter with margarine, the restaurant should make this change on temporary basis. Accordingly, changes should be implemented.
Secondly, the manager is saying that only 2 percent customers complaint on not getting butter. Perhaps many customers are assuming that soon they will start getting butter. Moreover, many customers do not complaint regarding it, but they may stop coming to the restaurant as they are not happy with replacement of butter with margarine. This way restaurant may loose its regular customers. The memorandum do not mention regarding the increase or decrease in number of customers after the changes has been made. Thus, the number of customers should be tracked after and before the replacement.
Lastly, the memorandum mentions that customers may not be able to distinguish between butter and margarine. Maybe customers are able to know the difference between butter and margarine but they are not making any complaints. Again, this will result in dissatisfaction among customers. In result, they will stop coming to the restaurant. Customers may file case against restaurant as they are fibbed. The restaurant should clearly mention this change. Moreover, survey should be conducted to know about the reactions of people on this change. This will help to know whether it is liked or disliked by the customers.
To conclude, though it may seem that author has done some research before backing the prospect of making permanent replacement of butter with margarine, an in-depth scrutiny reveals that none of the arguments put forth are backed by exhaustive analysis; thus, providing little credible support. As it stands, the recommendation looks flawed in multiple respects and may not give the results the author expects.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 2146 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.196 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.726 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.208 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.679 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.708 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 189, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun complaints is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...eriment is successful as there are very less complaints made by customers. Maybe thi...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...e manager is saying that only 2 percent customers complaint on not getting butter. Perhap...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...with margarine. This way restaurant may loose its regular customers. The memorandum d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34866828087 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82909448378 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479418886199 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.5677141569 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0416666667 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2083333333 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218745069099 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634420060418 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696358070568 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121756973309 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548916647916 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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