The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a listener-supported public radio station.
"For the past year, as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base, our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music. In recent months, many long-term supporters of our station have written to complain about what they describe as the un-American bias of the program. In addition, the local newspaper has published a recent editorial critical of our shift in programming. Therefore, in order to forestall any further adverse publicity for the station and to avoid the loss of additional listener-supporters, we should discontinue our current emphasis on Latino and world music and restore the time devoted to traditional American folk music to its former level."
The business manager of a public radio station argues that the station should back to the previous status to stop losing listener-supporters because they allocated less attention to traditional american folk music. he mentions that many old fans complained and the local newspaper has published an editorial against the program. The argument seems plausible at first glance; however, further investigation and pursuing situations reveal some apparent flaws in his notion.
The author fails to explain what was the efforts to broaden their supporter base. negative is possible that the combination of their whole deeds and actions in addition to spending less time on traditional music give this perspective to the supporters that the result of these actions is un-american. Imagine that they changed some history programs from contemporary american history to Europe history. Meanwhile, the cooking program started to teach Meditarean meals instead of the traditional ones. The lack of information on the root of the fans comments is not vivid, and he can not relate the critics directly to less time spending on folk music.
The writer of the memorandum does not mention the positive comments and appraises among listeners and supporters and point out the negative ones. he then makes those comments as the building blocks of his conclusion and indicates that these comments plus the recent editorial critical of their program shift are convincible factors to discontinue the current situation. he should glean more evidence about the growth rate of negative and positive comments. For example, they may have lost 10 percent of their supporters equal to 1000 people, and simultaneously they experience 50 percent rise in new supporters equal to 4000 people. it is crystal clear that absorbing more fans in comparison to losing less old fans is not a remarkable issue to cancel their decision.
Moreover, the passage states that the problem is related to recent months but no additional data provided to investigate the causality of the decline in the popularity. More research and inquiry should be employed to study the reason for the increase in opposite views. it is possible that the music selection and the content of the programs are not attractive to the audience.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1884 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.19 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.767 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.978 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.626 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ion to traditional american folk music. he mentions that many old fans complained ...
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Line 15, column 83, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Negative
...fforts to broaden their supporter base. negative is possible that the combination of the...
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Line 25, column 147, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...orters and point out the negative ones. he then makes those comments as the buildi...
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Line 25, column 371, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...s to discontinue the current situation. he should glean more evidence about the gr...
^^
Line 25, column 561, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...equal to 1000 people, and simultaneously they experience 50 percent rise in new s...
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Line 25, column 635, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in new supporters equal to 4000 people. it is crystal clear that absorbing more fa...
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Line 35, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...son for the increase in opposite views. it is possible that the music selection an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 363.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39393939394 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81313487262 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564738292011 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0060712705 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.375 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255681381477 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710278402279 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078041955894 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141753069528 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826370543363 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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