The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the compl

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The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.

Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaint received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local business that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.

The business manager of a television station recommends to restore the previously appropriated time to the weather forecasting and local news. To shore up his claim, he mentions that after reducing the time allocated for these two programs, both viewers and the advertising revenue plummeted compelling for an exigent need to restore it for the sustainability of the station. Although the evidences supplied by the manager might be true, his assumption and the derived final conclusion is utterly fallacious, and can be substantiated if below described specific details are addressed.

The business manager explicitly mentions that after decreasing the time to broadcast weather and local news, accompanied with the increased national news, the station received more complaints related to weather and the local news. However, he does not explicate further regarding what type of complaints the station received: the weather related news are quite boring, infect and hence the viewers might have complained suggesting the shut down of it completely. Similarly, viewers might have complained about the local news as they still perceived it unnecessarily lengthy. No body enjoy watching same banal scene happening in own neighbor, so the viewers might have intense interest to know further more about international affairs. The manager reveals they the limited the time separated for weather and local news increasing the national news time: there is a possibility that before the change the time for national news was only 15 minutes and the time for weather and local news was 1 hour and 45 minutes. After the change the time for national news might have been 25 minutes (merely 10 minutes more than before) and the time for remaining two programs might have been reduced by only 10 minutes. In this case, the whole program design is against the consumers' preferences. Therefore, in order to prop up the argument, the manager should elucidate these details.

By the same token, the manager cites that the advertisement revenue has been abated over the last year; however, this argument is also abstruse. There might have been several reasons behind loss on interest of the advertisers. There might have emerged competitors who accede to advertise at a quite cheaper rate. Therefore, personally I advise the manager to carryout research about the adversary in the market. Manager's recommendation would be far robust if he encompass these facts about competing TV stations.

Finally and probably most importantly, the manager assumes that restoring the previous time for the weather and local news will attract more viewers and the revenue. Nevertheless, there may be an entertainment show in another TV channel alluring more viewers at night. In such circumstance, viewers would find news more vapid even if it is restored, for people anticipate some enjoy, and amusement at night after the whole-day work. He has considered that people would love to watch news in lieu of amusing show even during night. Laughable, isn't it? Therefore, the manager would have engendered more compelling recommendation, if he had explained several abstruse points hidden behind.

To recapitulate, the assumption and the recommendation put forwarded by the manager is totally incompetent. His argument would have been far strong if he was able to address many specific details raised above. Clearly, more exhaustive research is needed before jumping to this conclusion hurriedly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends restoring'.
Suggestion: recommends restoring
...usiness manager of a television station recommends to restore the previously appropriated time to the...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'Nobody'?
Suggestion: Nobody
...ill perceived it unnecessarily lengthy. No body enjoy watching same banal scene happeni...
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Line 3, column 981, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nutes and the time for weather and local news was 1 hour and 45 minutes. After th...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t have emerged competitors who accede to advertise at a quite cheaper rate. There...
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Line 5, column 464, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'encompasses'.
Suggestion: encompasses
...ecommendation would be far robust if he encompass these facts about competing TV stations...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...e facts about competing TV stations. Finally and probably most importantly, the mana...
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Line 7, column 543, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...sing show even during night. Laughable, isnt it? Therefore, the manager would have e...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'regarding', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'by the same token']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230383973289 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.175292153589 0.15541462614 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0767946577629 0.0836205057962 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0717863105175 0.0520304965353 138% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0283806343907 0.0272364105082 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.106844741235 0.125424944231 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0717863105175 0.0416121511921 173% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8334671903 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0233722871452 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00333889816361 0.001811407834 184% => OK
Determiners: 0.111853088481 0.113004496875 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0283806343907 0.0255425247493 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00500834724541 0.0127820249294 39% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3470.0 2731.13054187 127% => OK
No of words: 545.0 446.07635468 122% => OK
Chars per words: 6.36697247706 6.12365571057 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.57801047555 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394495412844 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.343119266055 0.287650121315 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222018348624 0.208842608468 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.152293577982 0.135150697306 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8334671903 2.79052419416 102% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 207.018472906 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497247706422 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 59.9175417467 52.1807786196 115% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 21.8 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8439840905 57.7814097925 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.8 141.986410481 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 23.2022227129 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52 0.724660767414 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 56.1119266055 51.9672348444 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.48484848485 1.8405768891 81% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.58349408463 0.441005458295 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119279272146 0.135418324435 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.11182032925 0.0829849096947 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503530185948 0.58762219726 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.168090877277 0.147661913831 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.207782227929 0.193483328276 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165744300042 0.0970749176394 171% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.415251439637 0.42659136922 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.145417011126 0.0774707102158 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.377249748523 0.312017818177 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123069481569 0.0698173142475 176% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.33743842365 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 13.0 6.46551724138 201% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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