The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
It may not helpful to attract more viewers to their program and to avoid losing advertising revenues by restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level. Because the author has made some mistakes in the logic of this article. Here I'll list some of the mistakes.
First, the author said most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with their station's coverage of weather and local news. However, he didn't say a word about the total number of complaints they received, and what if they just received 3 complaints and two of them are about the coverage? Maybe these viewers are just wanting to complain there are too much advertisement in the program which have no relationship with the quality of programs itself? the proportion doesn't make any sense when samples are too little. As a result, the reason is not credible enough.
Second, the author mentioned the local business that used to advertise during late-night news program have just canceled their advertising with them. The author didn't write the reason why the businesses have canceled their advertising, and what if it's just because these local businesses has just run out money so that they didn't have any money to buy their advertising business? And what if the local business just finds some other ways of advertising like billboard? The author didn't say a word about the reason but just said local business canceled their advertising. Maybe there is no relationship between advertising and station's coverage of programs.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1254 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.823 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.527 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 80 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.757 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...her and local news to its former level. Because the author has made some mistakes in th...
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Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: ILL_I_LL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
...akes in the logic of this article. Here Ill list some of the mistakes. First, th...
^^^
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...he logic of this article. Here Ill list some of the mistakes. First, the author said mos...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... of weather and local news. However, he didnt say a word about the total number of co...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ip with the quality of programs itself? the proportion doesnt make any sense when s...
^^^
Line 3, column 481, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...lity of programs itself? the proportion doesnt make any sense when samples are too lit...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...their advertising with them. The author didnt write the reason why the businesses hav...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ses has just run out money so that they didnt have any money to buy their advertising...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... advertising like billboard? The author didnt say a word about the reason but just sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.9520958084 8% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 254.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03149606299 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55335525128 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 204.123752495 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511811023622 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.6229912874 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3076923077 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173916917209 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626526547407 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739709286779 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127348641418 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359358965346 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 98.500998004 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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