The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Peter Jones.
“In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Peter
Jones plans to build a multi-million-dollar subway system. The subway will run
through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only
form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about
inconsistent buses and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally,
the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less
time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Peter Jones expects to see an immediate increase in
worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the
argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the
implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Here the author states, the traffic jam hamper the productivity of worker and thus frustrate the economy of Briggsville. Building the subway system through the major downtown where bus is the only transportation system, will solve the traffic jam and increase the productivity of worker.
Here the mayor of the city said, the only transportation way in downtown where it will be build. But if the traffic jam occurred within the city, then it won’t solve the problem. Because it is indeed need in within the city, not the downtown. So argument in this regard is flawed and doesn’t improve the economy.
Secondly, People of the city complaining about the inconsistent of buses and the safety. So the mayor should increase the safety of the bus where people are riding. Building the subway won’t ameliorate the safety and the inconsistencies. Rather the mayor should focus on building the new safety major and do something that is more convenient for the people of the city. So building the subway won’t help to rise the economy.
The existing road is also running twenty-four hours. The city is facing problems in a certain time of the day and night. If this happen then building subway and running for twenty-four hours won’t solve the traffic congestion. Rather the Mayor should build something which will solve the particular time problem as well as the whole problem.
If the people are so lazy that they won’t want to work so much. And they like to entertain themselves then solving these problem won’t improve the economy at all. Rather it will be multi-million-dollar wasting. If the motorist won’t be punctual, then they will be always being late whether traffic happen or not.
So the author is not so much persuasive in making the argument flawless. In various several cases, it is vulnerable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1477 1500
No. of Different Words: 136 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.719 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.629 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.946 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.314 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 200, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
...solve the problem. Because it is indeed need in within the city, not the downtown. S...
^^^^
Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ate the safety and the inconsistencies. Rather the mayor should focus on building the ...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 228, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...urs won’t solve the traffic congestion. Rather the Mayor should build something which ...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 343, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e problem as well as the whole problem. If the people are so lazy that they won’t ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...ke to entertain themselves then solving these problem won’t improve the economy at all. Rathe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...oblem won’t improve the economy at all. Rather it will be multi-million-dollar wasting...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 305.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9868852459 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74438960082 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459016393443 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9515103212 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.4285714286 119.503703932 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.5238095238 23.324526521 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172573328173 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539625711702 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576627005028 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866442210664 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500845058897 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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