The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Smith Jones.
"In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The Mayor is planning to build a subway system to solve the traffic problem in downtown areas where buese surve as the only form of public transportation. There are several assumption made by the Mayor to prove the subway system is the right solution to the traffic problem.
First, the Mayor mentions that residents have been complaining about inconsistent buses and lack of safety while riding the buses. In other words, It is assumed that with less people taking bus, these problem of bus will be solved. However, the inconsistent buses may because of lack of bus drivers, thus the shift is not run well. And the lack of safety problem may be the result of roads that are not wide enough to contain the amount of vehicles. In this case, none of these problem will be solved if less people taking bus.
Moreover, the note claims that subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. This implies that there is need for subway twenty-four hours a day. However, most of people may not live in downtown areas, and shops may be closed after 8pm. Therefore, people may only use the subway during the rush hour like, 8-9 am and 5-7 pm. In a word, running twenty-four hours a day may be unnecessary.
Last, the Mayor readily assume that with less time spent on traffic, there will be an immediate increase in worker productivity. Nevertheless, whether the time spent at traffic will be shortened is needed to be proved. It is possible that there is no room for the stations at the most busy areas, and the stations will be built far away from them. Therefore, it may take more time since commuters have to walk further from stations to where they are going.
Taken together, the assumptions need to be examined by the aspects mentioned above to prove that subway system is a valid solution to the problem.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1442 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.52 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.346 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 89 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 58 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.33 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 166, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...orm of public transportation. There are several assumption made by the Mayor to prove the subway s...
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Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...ublic transportation. There are several assumption made by the Mayor to prove the subway s...
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Line 1, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... right solution to the traffic problem. First, the Mayor mentions that residents...
^^^
Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...In other words, It is assumed that with less people taking bus, these problem of bus...
^^^^
Line 2, column 196, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...sumed that with less people taking bus, these problem of bus will be solved. However, the inc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 473, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this problem' or 'these problems'?
Suggestion: this problem; these problems
...ount of vehicles. In this case, none of these problem will be solved if less people taking bu...
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Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...none of these problem will be solved if less people taking bus. Moreover, the not...
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Line 2, column 529, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll be solved if less people taking bus. Moreover, the note claims that subway wi...
^^^
Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ubway twenty-four hours a day. However, most of people may not live in downtown areas, and sho...
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Line 3, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ty-four hours a day may be unnecessary. Last, the Mayor readily assume that with...
^^^
Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from stations to where they are going. Taken together, the assumptions need to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 319.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65517241379 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4420243781 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501567398119 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.3281133045 57.8364921388 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.3529411765 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7647058824 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147943266705 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567633286552 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051972326178 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0967545651529 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655671528916 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.3550499002 145% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.197005988 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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