Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The statement mentions that recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a huge reduction in the species population. While it may seem reasonable at first place, there is several evidence needed to butress the argument.
Firstly, the argument readily assume that incursions of deep-sea fishermen is the only reason of the reduction in the Madagascan shrimp's population. However, is there any other possible cause of the reduction? For example, maybe the habitat has been polluted by petrolean recently. Or, there are new predators emerge in the habitat. The author should offer the evidence that no other reason is accountable for the reduction and show the regression analysis to show the relationship between the number of incursion and the shrimp population.
Secondly, the statement has mentioned that the population is not going to return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. However, the author should offer the prediction of the breeding speed of the Madagascan shrimp and the frequency that deep-sea fishermen come based on the real data of past few years. Without these two important data, we can not determine whether the shrimp population is going to return to the original levels.
Lastly, the author claims that this trend is expected to continue over the next several years. However, since the fishermen may start fishing the Madagascan shrimp recently, maybe the customers don't like how the shrimp taste. Therefore, demand for the shrimp may decrease and the fishermen may not come to fish it anymore. The author should provide specific evidence to assure the demand for the shrimp is likely to increase or maintain for the next several years, such as the market share of the Madagascan shrimp or the questionaire shows that the customers is willing to buy it.
In conclusion, the specific evidence mentioned above is needed to evaluate the argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1582 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.054 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.422 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...eem reasonable at first place, there is several evidence needed to butress the argument. Fi...
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Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vidence needed to butress the argument. Firstly, the argument readily assume tha...
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Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of incursion and the shrimp population. Secondly, the statement has mentioned th...
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Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...going to return to the original levels. Lastly, the author claims that this tren...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...an shrimp recently, maybe the customers dont like how the shrimp taste. Therefore, d...
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Line 7, column 248, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the shrimp taste. Therefore, demand for the shrimp may decrease and the fisherme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 312.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21153846154 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64331957882 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490384615385 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5460169589 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.4 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335019035079 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109006200062 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119623546627 0.0701772020484 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175359499218 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103624414362 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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