The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
In the given argument there is comparison between yearly revenue and expenditure of Humana university and Omni university. Nowadays, students took more enrollments in the online degree program at Omni university and nearby than classroom teaching degree courses and due to this reason Omni University decreases the expenditures on infrastructure. The president of Humana University wrote memorandum to create and start the online program like those Universities. With online program president predict that the budgetary difficulties will solve. The prediction and the argument on which memorandum is based are not convincing. There are following reasons to make my stance strong and prove the unreasonable thoughts of the president.
Firstly, Behind the increase in revenue there are so many different reasons, it is not necessary that online program is the only technique to increase enrollment in university. The president focused on online program and ignore other factors such as quality of faculty, infrastructure, syllabus, updating of the program and so on. The students took enrollment on the basis of program details and investment for the program. It is not appropriate to take decision only based on mode of program. There is possibility the Humana University lacked behind due to mentioned other reasons. Before starting the online program, it is important to understand the cause of the less enrollments this year.
Secondly, enrollment in online degree program increased by 50 percent but how many students completed and paid fees of the program. It may be possible that students enroll to book seat, but they completed the course is not mentioned in the argument. Humana University should analyses the reasons which decrease the number of admissions in degree courses because then only the university get the beneficial plans.
Finally, Humana University president think that the online program will solve the financial problem, but online program will also have expenditures such as broadcasting of program, trained faculty, and other technologies. The activation of the program takes expenses and it is not sure to get high enrollment in the program and there is no guarantee that expenses for classroom maintenance will reduced.
In conclusion, while the author proposes a plausible solution, it needs to be better analyzed and presented in order to fortify the recommendation of implementing the online degrees programs to solve the enrollment and budget problems.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 383 350
No. of Characters: 2064 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.424 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.389 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.898 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.278 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.415 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...nd the increase in revenue there are so many different reasons, it is not necessary that onlin...
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Line 3, column 667, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun enrollments is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...mportant to understand the cause of the less enrollments this year. Secondly, enr...
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Line 7, column 396, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reduce'
Suggestion: reduce
...expenses for classroom maintenance will reduced. In conclusion, while the author pro...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 383.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51697127937 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98451808493 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475195822454 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9155679702 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.388888889 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2777777778 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366235281568 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118344268078 0.0743258471296 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702882545275 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199470511656 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892083704402 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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