The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp. Human Resources Manager: “Tobor
Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about
15 percent of employee sick days. Tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers
receive the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. In addition, the
company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule
confidential counseling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by
employees declined by 10 percent. Diord Corp. has had an increase in employee sick days over
the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counseling program.
These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity.”
Write a response in which you examine the argument’s unstated assumptions, making sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
This argument addressed a recommendation in order to reduce the number of sick days taken by employees of Diord Corp, a previously applied successful strategy applied by Tobor needed to be followed. This recommendation is based on several assumption as it would be illustrated in the following paragraphes.
For instance, Diord Corp human resource manager assumed that both of the orgainsations' employees have the same reasons to take sick days. Perhaps, the two organisations have different kind of daily works, which implies that the employees would experiences different illness reasons. Then, the applied strategies of either of the two organisation can not be applied on the other organisation as it is not predicted to experience the same results. Therefor, the author had to clarify reasonabily accepted reasons that shaped his/her assumption.
Foremore, Diord Corp human resource manager assumed that both of the two organisation works nature are congurent. Whereas, it is extrapolated from the argument that it is expected that the modification of Tobor insurance strategy would guarantee declination of the Diord Corp's employees sick days. Maybe both of Tobor and Diord Corp employees are experiencing different illness cases as well as different nature of daily works.
Moreover, it would be inferred from the argumnet that Diord Corp human resource manager assumes the investigation 15 percent of employees illness days of Tobor is corresponding to a higher percentage of mentall illness sick days of Diord Corp. Then, it is protrayed that the improvemnt of insurance of mental illneess sick days would significantly decline the overall number of sick days needed by Diord Corp employees.
In addition, it is assumped through the argument that on site psychologist would bolster the reduction annual sick days needed by the Diord Corp employees. Perhaps nother significant less costly strategy could be adopted. Then, the author had to provide clear evidences to support this assumption.
These previously demonstarted assumptions are a sample of set of assumption that is adopted by Diord Corp human resource manager in order to guarantee a reduction of employees annual sick days.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This recommendation is based on several assumption as it would be illustrated in the following paragraphes.
Error: paragraphes Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For instance, Diord Corp human resource manager assumed that both of the orgainsations' employees have the same reasons to take sick days.
Error: orgainsations Suggestion: organizations
Sentence: Then, the applied strategies of either of the two organisation can not be applied on the other organisation as it is not predicted to experience the same results.
Error: organisation Suggestion: organization
Sentence: Therefor, the author had to clarify reasonabily accepted reasons that shaped his/her assumption.
Error: reasonabily Suggestion: reasonably
Sentence: Foremore, Diord Corp human resource manager assumed that both of the two organisation works nature are congurent.
Error: organisation Suggestion: organization
Error: congurent Suggestion: congruent
Sentence: Moreover, it would be inferred from the argumnet that Diord Corp human resource manager assumes the investigation 15 percent of employees illness days of Tobor is corresponding to a higher percentage of mentall illness sick days of Diord Corp. Then, it is protrayed that the improvemnt of insurance of mental illneess sick days would significantly decline the overall number of sick days needed by Diord Corp employees.
Error: illneess Suggestion: illness
Error: improvemnt Suggestion: improvement
Error: protrayed Suggestion: portrayed
Error: mentall Suggestion: mental
Error: argumnet Suggestion: argument
Sentence: In addition, it is assumped through the argument that on site psychologist would bolster the reduction annual sick days needed by the Diord Corp employees.
Error: assumped Suggestion: assumed
Sentence: Perhaps nother significant less costly strategy could be adopted.
Error: nother Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: These previously demonstarted assumptions are a sample of set of assumption that is adopted by Diord Corp human resource manager in order to guarantee a reduction of employees annual sick days.
Error: demonstarted Suggestion: demonstrated
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1823 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.33 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.969 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.637 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.659 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
This argument addressed a recommendation...
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Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'several assumptions'.
Suggestion: several assumptions
...llowed. This recommendation is based on several assumption as it would be illustrated in the follo...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ustrated in the following paragraphes. For instance, Diord Corp human resource ...
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Line 2, column 247, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'experience'
Suggestion: experience
... which implies that the employees would experiences different illness reasons. Then, the ap...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...easons that shaped his/her assumption. Foremore, Diord Corp human resource mana...
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Line 3, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rganisation works nature are congurent. Whereas, it is extrapolated from the argument t...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll as different nature of daily works. Moreover, it would be inferred from the ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...k days needed by Diord Corp employees. In addition, it is assumped through the ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... evidences to support this assumption. These previously demonstarted assumption...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, then, well, whereas, for instance, in addition, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45161290323 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02055063625 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436950146628 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5674959049 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.933333333 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303699988283 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108187222812 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980064447661 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167138071816 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893580779849 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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