A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wit the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these example shape your position.
The author states that all student of a nation should study the same fields and methods until they enter the college. This statement is not true in order to grantee a compiling society. Whereas, all high and low level of education services is available and served by nation's people and not by expats.
For instance, a nation where different levels and methods of education is provided, is a nation where all kinds of jobs are allocated by workers who belong to this nation. Such as rubbish collectors and post office guys are present as jobs that are hired by native people and also factories managers, engineers and doctors are also jobs that is allocated by native people as well who belongs to one nation. Thus, nations should provide various levels of education for it's student to grantee a complementary society where all services could be served by it's own people without need of expats to be hired for a certain types of job.
Conversely, nations should grantee same educational level for all of it's students to grantee equal chances to all of it's people to get same level of care and scholarships, which enhance the equality of human kind of that nation. But at the same time the nation can not force the poor people of that nation to enter their children in an relatively expensive educational level. Thus, the rich family only would get the educational services to their children up to the college entry, while the poor children do not have a chance to get a studying in college opportunity. Consequently, a biased society would be generated in the absence of equality. Therefore entry of college can not be limited on a level of education. it should be based on qualifications from various educational background students. For example, international private schools as well as public schools students should get the same chances to join a certain college. In addition to some fields of industrial educational systems other than high schools should get a chance to enter colleges as well.
The previously illustrated examples is a sample of a set of examples and evidences that bolster the invalidation of the author's opinion about students studying courses up to college entry.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, if, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92991913747 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7144851197 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458221024259 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5393078604 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.933333333 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7333333333 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1333333333 5.21951772744 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243645792789 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894352405357 0.0831039109588 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944090679388 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151691847219 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072480470382 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.