The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the argument the author has put up a point that a nearby town of Ocean View had built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel two years ago. In these two years, the tourism sector of Ocean view had proliferated, businesses were opened and moreover tax revenues were risen by 30 percent. Therefore, according to the author, same amendments should be done in Hopewell so that that economy will be inclined. Author has put up the points where changes of other town is discussed but has missed clarity regarding Hopewell town. Therefore, distinct assumptions can be devised from the argument that are discussed in the essay.
Firstly, the author has presented the changes done in the nearby town of Ocean View but has not given any facts or evidences regarding what has been done by the Hopewell town. Whether the economy of Hopewell is less or greater than Ocean View? Why author has only provided the tracks of the Ocean View and not any other town? A lot of questions can be raised for the town of Hopewell. There is also not a guarantee of whether after building golf course and resort the economy of Hopewill will increase or not.
Secondly, the author only talked about the constructions inside the town but has never discussed a point related to connectivity. One assumption can be applied that the reason why the tourism has increased in Ocean View is that they have all the facilities of an airport(both national and inernational), railway stations, better highways and tourism spots too. This is not necessary that all of these are present in Hopewell too. Therefore, it would be wrong to say that economy of Hopewell will definitely boost up.
Thirdly, the author has considered the case of tourism only. There are other sectors that invloves in the economy sectors such as jobs, education, health care facilities etcetra. None of these are presented by the author. By any means, it is not necessary that if one town has invested in one particular sector it is justifiable by other town to do the same.
Lastly, although the author has provided valid statements they can not be summarised similarly for another town. There is always going to be the positive and negative impact. Therefore, it is not necessary by doing the same construcions predicted results would be obtained.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1857 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.725 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.521 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.478 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.044 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86005089059 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59681397472 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465648854962 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4696443202 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9523809524 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304053551468 0.218282227539 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878176591137 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114002258651 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160632873614 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119993918761 0.0628817314937 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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