The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president and Administrative staff of Grove College made a claim for keeping their college a "female College". For evidence, they have provided the result of a survey where a major number of students and over half of the alumnae voted for only female education though the majority vote for teachers was for "Co-education". While Author's contention may be true that they should continue the old tradition of being a female college for improvement of morale and for financial support from alumnae; his or her argument as it stands now, rests on three unstated assumptions that weaken the arguments persuasiveness.
Firstly, the author assumes that over half of alumnae who voted for " female education" provide financial support for the college. It may be a case that alumni who are actually providing donations for the college are more enthusiastic about "co-education". So they can be discouraged to provide support if it is being continued as a female college. Besides, there is another possibility that the dependency on alumnae for financial issues will be mitigated due to the increased number of both male and female students.
Secondly , the author assumes that students who are voting for the female students are the major concern whereas the author is ignoring the results of the teachers survey. It can be a case that, teachers are more willing to bring some positive improvement in the college environment and therefore voting for the co-education on the other hand students are not really caring the matter of college betterment or the financial issue.Besides, there may be another possibility that teachers are concern about college financial crisis which is not known to the college students and the financial support from alumnae are not adequate therefore they are more willing to encourage men students for more supports.
Thirdly, the author assumes that improving the morale of students is dependent on gender. It may be a case that when students both male and female are working together and learning together, they can be taught the best moral support like how to respect the opposite gender which is not possible in only female colleges. Therefore the reasoning behind the female college may not be correct that only female college serves the best morale training rather than co-education.
So to conclude as the author’s argument and supporting evidence of keeping the school solely for female rise a lot of questions. Therefore if these questions are not properly addressed, the recommendation can not be taken for further steps for implementation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2121 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.086 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.19 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... made a claim for keeping their college a 'female College'. For evidenc...
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Line 1, column 611, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...ee unstated assumptions that weaken the arguments persuasiveness. Firstly, the author ...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...th male and female students. Secondly , the author assumes that students who ar...
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Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
...llege betterment or the financial issue.Besides, there may be another possibility that ...
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Line 7, column 321, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s not possible in only female colleges. Therefore the reasoning behind the female college...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ely for female rise a lot of questions. Therefore if these questions are not properly add...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, whereas, while, as for, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30935251799 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1543694982 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448441247002 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.609324793 57.8364921388 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.142857143 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7857142857 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 5.70786347227 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18090204596 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796726187524 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980676804933 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108844298443 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058173993983 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.11 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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