The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president of Groove College decided to preserve its old-tradition of all female education. The decision was based on the evidence that in a survey 80% student preferred all female education and over half of the alumnae prefered the same. However the arguement is flawed in many respects and can be better evaluated if following questions are answered.
Firstly, Total number of students responded to the survey? The author prematurely assumes that since 80% of the students who surveyed were in favour of all female education majority of students supported this idea however number of students who surveyed could be less. For instance, It might be the case that out of 1000 students only 100 people responded to the survey form out of which 80 students were in support. From above example we can imply that its not neccessary that majority of the students were in favour. A proper research is needed to find out the number of people who responded the survey form.
Secondly, Is surveying students right method? The Author assumes that the students might be neutral while responding to the survey which might not be the case. Since the college consist of all female students all students who responded to survey will also be females. It is most likely that female will prefer all female educator college as that would benefit them. The principle needs to take input from multiple groups of people including some female, some male students in the city, parents and so on to get a better overview.
Thirdly, No of alumnae who answered the form? The author again talks little about the number of alumnae who answered the survey form. It might be the case that the total number of alumnae answered the form is less. Also the principle assumes that alumnae might stop funding the college if its not all female college. However this might not be the case, alumnae might still keep supporting college irrespective of the decision. College can also get funding from other sources.
In conclusion, the arguement is based on several unwarranted assumption and can be better evaluated if the above mention question is answered. If principle provide details such as Number of students and alumnae who answered the survey form and take inputs from multiple group of people it would help to better assess the arguement.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1885 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.395 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.524 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.588 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... half of the alumnae prefered the same. However the arguement is flawed in many respect...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'proper research'.
Suggestion: Proper research
...ajority of the students were in favour. A proper research is needed to find out the number of peo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the survey which might not be the case. Since the college consist of all female stude...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: Now
...n to get a better overview. Thirdly, No of alumnae who answered the form? The a...
^^
Line 7, column 216, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...r of alumnae answered the form is less. Also the principle assumes that alumnae migh...
^^^^
Line 7, column 318, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... college if its not all female college. However this might not be the case, alumnae mig...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96658097686 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44782997454 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416452442159 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5090628347 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133502347664 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584635183157 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889132964578 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972875844672 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824850869052 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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