The prompt shares the Teeburg Town Boards decisions of assigning budget to establishing more recreational facilities. Despite the judicious decision of using surveys and statistical data to finalize the outcome, the board members deviate from the logical reasoning procedure and make erroneous judgments.
The first conundrum arises from the targets of the questionnaire. The head of a household, often being the breadwinner, is in classical familial terms is the father. So potentially, the top results of the survey are the general interests of the male population of the community whereas interests of the women is broadly overlooked. Moreover, since snowmobile and use of fire arms in skeet shooting is clearly dangerous for small children and putting green mainly requires a sense patience and mindfulness that hyper-energetic youngsters and teenagers generally lack, all three choices are negligent to the recreational needs of the non-adult population.
Additionally, the problem of costs must also be taken into account. A used snowmobile costs over a thousand dollars and the clothing and gear are also costly; skeet shooting ranges have high maintenance cost composed of but not limited to the guns, ammunition, implementing safety protocols and the clay-based targets. While setting up a green putting for an entire community is not as costly as the other two, but using it requires encumbering each household with the costs of golf equipment. Consequently, prior to underwriting such a hefty expenditure, the amount of the intended budget must be levied against other important needs of the community. For instance, is it wise to strain the town budget for making a snowmobile trail when the community needs better roads or a newer public transport system?
Lastly, this result is based on the responses from less than half of this community. The utmost problem with turnout is that doesn’t reflect even the majority of this community. Perhaps, Teeburge Town’s population is mostly comprised of frugal and indigent citizens and the results of the mentioned questionnaire only reflects the most affluent residents, therefore ,given the costly nature of these activities for families, it is not wise to prodigally fund activities that wouldn’t benefit the majority. Furthermore, when comparing their options, citizens may prefer simpler and cheaper facilities like a badminton court so that the budget could support better parks or governmentally sponsored swimming pools which will as well serve as leisurely environments for the public.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 2114 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.338 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.892 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 97 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.241 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.301 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put after the verb 'being'.
Suggestion: being often
...questionnaire. The head of a household, often being the breadwinner, is in classical famili...
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Line 4, column 217, Rule ID: ENTIRELY_COMPRISED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mostly composed of'?
Suggestion: mostly composed of
... Perhaps, Teeburge Town’s population is mostly comprised of frugal and indigent citizens and the re...
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Line 4, column 365, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s the most affluent residents, therefore ,given the costly nature of these activit...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, lastly, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49746192893 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00350658695 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609137055838 0.468620217663 130% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.1930096246 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.4 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2666666667 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.70786347227 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151027269679 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451522291155 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578583782178 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0909122147471 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439879164342 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.32208582834 122% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 98.500998004 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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