“I am pleased to announce that Plexma’s new manufacturing site is on schedule to open
next year. In addition to our regular line of cars, Plexma has also begun designing and
testing a line of automated self-driving vehicles. In a recent survey conducted by the
Canbury Gazette, 60 percent of residents reported that they would purchase a Plexma selfdriving
vehicle in the future if they were confident in the vehicles’ safety. We are happy to
report that last summer, we tested our new line of self-driving vehicles in downtown
Canbury with great success. Not only did our five tested vehicles remain accident-free for
two months during testing, but in a survey conducted after testing, 90 percent of
Canbury’s residents reported that when they were downtown and our vehicles were in
operation they felt very safe. Because steady demand for our self-driving vehicles will
create new jobs and thereby greatly benefit Canbury’s economy as a whole, I recommend
that you vote to allow Plexma to begin manufacturing and selling these vehicles in
Canbury when our new site opens.”
In newspaper it is announced that Plexmas new manufacturing site is on schedule to open in next year.They also has begun desoigning a automated self driving vehicles.They tested the self automated vehicles in down town and the result of the five vehicle remain accident free for two months.Author also mentioned self driving car will create new jobs and the recommend to vote it for its manufacturing enhancment and to sell.Here author failed to give some constructive detailed explanation to support the recommendation.
Plexmas tested their new line self automated vehicles in downtown.The result of the five tested vehicles remain accident free.It is not clear from the claimed explanation for their testing results success.there is only mentioned about 2 months of testing . It might be happen that testing result failed to safety for another months.As it is about human safety so long time should be monitored to look up the safety.
Again,residents report that in downtown their operation in car was safe.But it needs to mentions more testing areas to claim the the operation of the vehicle is safe.Only operations safe in downtown is not accepted as the vehicles are safe for passengers.
Another point is mentioned is they creats new jobs and benefit the economy.It is not clear from the assuptions.Because self driving option will create less dependence on driver . so people buy vehicles and they can operate the car without hiring driver.so it creats less opportunity for job.It can not increase the economic growth.
Without proper constructive explanation we should not support the proposed claim. The proposed claim needs proper results of evaluation so that one can rely on the given evidence to support the claim
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 290 350
more arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1426 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.917 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.631 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.211 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.412 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.781 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...ite is on schedule to open in next year.They also has begun desoigning a automated s...
^^^^
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...schedule to open in next year.They also has begun desoigning a automated self drivi...
^^^
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ext year.They also has begun desoigning a automated self driving vehicles.They te...
^
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...gning a automated self driving vehicles.They tested the self automated vehicles in d...
^^^^
Line 1, column 291, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Author
...cle remain accident free for two months.Author also mentioned self driving car will cr...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...lf driving car will create new jobs and the recommend to vote it for its manufacturing enhanc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend voting'.
Suggestion: recommend voting
...riving car will create new jobs and the recommend to vote it for its manufacturing enhancment and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 425, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Here
...ts manufacturing enhancment and to sell.Here author failed to give some constructive...
^^^^
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ine self automated vehicles in downtown.The result of the five tested vehicles rema...
^^^
Line 3, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ve tested vehicles remain accident free.It is not clear from the claimed explanati...
^^
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...only mentioned about 2 months of testing . It might be happen that testing result ...
^^
Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...ult failed to safety for another months.As it is about human safety so long time s...
^^
Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ult failed to safety for another months.As it is about human safety so long time s...
^^
Line 5, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , residents
...onitored to look up the safety. Again,residents report that in downtown their operation...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...owntown their operation in car was safe.But it needs to mentions more testing areas...
^^^
Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...eration in car was safe.But it needs to mentions more testing areas to claim the the ope...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...to mentions more testing areas to claim the the operation of the vehicle is safe.Only o...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 126, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...to mentions more testing areas to claim the the operation of the vehicle is safe.Only o...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Only
...he the operation of the vehicle is safe.Only operations safe in downtown is not acce...
^^^^
Line 7, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...creats new jobs and benefit the economy.It is not clear from the assuptions.Becaus...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...omy.It is not clear from the assuptions.Because self driving option will create less de...
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Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...on will create less dependence on driver . so people buy vehicles and they can ope...
^^
Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...will create less dependence on driver . so people buy vehicles and they can operat...
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Line 7, column 292, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...r.so it creats less opportunity for job.It can not increase the economic growth. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 277.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27797833935 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98843494802 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505415162455 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 128.672003074 57.8364921388 222% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.75 119.503703932 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.625 23.324526521 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13134225869 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488850840736 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080734769547 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689317034144 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913009900752 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.8 14.3799401198 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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