A recent study reported that pet owners have longer, healthier lives on average than do people who own no pets. Specifically, dog owners tend to have a lower incidence of heart disease. In light of these findings, Sherwood Hospital should form a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to institute an adopt-a-dog program. The program would encourage dog ownership for patients recovering from heart disease, which should reduce these patients' chance of experiencing continuing heart problems and also reduce their need for ongoing treatment. As a further benefit, the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter. And that will reduce the incidence of heart disease in the general population
In recent study, it is reported that the people who have pet have longer and healthier life than who have none.Moreover the the most special factor of the having pet is to reduce heart disease.Here author suggests that to initiate a Dog program which will reduce heart disease patients chance of feeling continuing heart disease and also reduce their needs of ongoing treatment.For further benefit author claimed about the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pet so that it will reduce their incidence of heart disease in general population.Here author claimed assumptions failed to provide some of evidence to support.
Firstly, author reported that pet owners have healthier life than who do not have.Here he have not mentioned about the area of the region from where the data is collected.Also he have not given any idea of any percentage about the collected data.Without any evidence we should not rely on any data.
secondly,author mentioned adopt a dog program which will reduce patients heart problem and reduce their ongoing treatment.But he have not mentioned what are reasons behind reducing heart disease. I might be happen that dog is like a pet friend and it can removes loneliness which is good for mind.But if some one have critical condition and taking medication then these dog program can not pacify the patients condition.moreover It can not reduce ongoing treatment.Proper medication and proposed balanced diet proposed by doctors can only reduce heart disease.
without proper researched collected data we should not come to the conclusion of that adopt pet will decrease the incidence of the heart disease.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 278 350
No. of Characters: 1370 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.083 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.928 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.422 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.261 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.542 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.837 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.26 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...pet have longer and healthier life than who have none.Moreover the the most special...
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Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Moreover
...r and healthier life than who have none.Moreover the the most special factor of the havi...
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Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...r and healthier life than who have none.Moreover the the most special factor of the havi...
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Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...lthier life than who have none.Moreover the the most special factor of the having pet i...
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Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...lthier life than who have none.Moreover the the most special factor of the having pet i...
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Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Here
...e having pet is to reduce heart disease.Here author suggests that to initiate a Dog ...
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Line 1, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t disease and also reduce their needs of ongoing treatment.For further benefit au...
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...educe their needs of ongoing treatment.For further benefit author claimed about th...
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Suggestion: Here
... of heart disease in general population.Here author claimed assumptions failed to p...
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Line 1, column 583, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...isease in general population.Here author claimed assumptions failed to provide s...
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Line 1, column 622, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r claimed assumptions failed to provide some of evidence to support. Firstly,...
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Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...hat pet owners have healthier life than who do not have.Here he have not mentioned ...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Here
...ave healthier life than who do not have.Here he have not mentioned about the area of...
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Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...thier life than who do not have.Here he have not mentioned about the area of the reg...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...t mentioned about the area of the region from where the data is collected.Also he...
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Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...egion from where the data is collected.Also he have not given any idea of any perce...
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Line 3, column 173, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...egion from where the data is collected.Also he have not given any idea of any perce...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...rom where the data is collected.Also he have not given any idea of any percentage ab...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
...any percentage about the collected data.Without any evidence we should not rely on any...
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Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e collected data.Without any evidence we should not rely on any data. secondly...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...nce we should not rely on any data. secondly,author mentioned adopt a dog program wh...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , author
...should not rely on any data. secondly,author mentioned adopt a dog program which wil...
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Line 5, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: But
...blem and reduce their ongoing treatment.But he have not mentioned what are reasons ...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...d reduce their ongoing treatment.But he have not mentioned what are reasons behind r...
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Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'remove'
Suggestion: remove
...hat dog is like a pet friend and it can removes loneliness which is good for mind.But i...
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Line 5, column 298, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...moves loneliness which is good for mind.But if some one have critical condition and...
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Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...oneliness which is good for mind.But if some one have critical condition and taking medi...
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Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Proper
...ver It can not reduce ongoing treatment.Proper medication and proposed balanced diet p...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...ctors can only reduce heart disease. without proper researched collected data we sho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 267.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2734082397 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88771088582 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494382022472 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 22.8473053892 232% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 177.506056235 57.8364921388 307% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 281.6 119.503703932 236% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.4 23.324526521 229% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.8 5.70786347227 277% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264504163882 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142877190806 0.0743258471296 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564870493785 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161188562093 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500859428533 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.1 14.3799401198 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.22 48.3550499002 19% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 12.197005988 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.11 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 12.3882235529 444% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.2 11.1389221557 208% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 55.0 11.9071856287 462% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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