Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining,
while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.
Which do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to
support your opinion.
It is true that entertainment is neccessary in school and other people believe that only educating the students is to be purpose of the school.This eassy strongly agree with that more entertaining is essential in education. Firstly the eassy would describe the reasons of why I am agree with that and what would be bad impact if it is not established in school.
The main reason of selecting that is, student would be more productive in the school. If students enjot to go school, they will do their classes properly. When schools authority creats more extra curriculum activities, which gives pleasure to students and give them inspiration to do their lessons more effectively. For instance, the records shows that in Canadian school where students did more good result in last year compare to previous year after opening a new door , for the students to engage with extra curriculum activities more which gives them joy.
However, if intertainment is not given preference in school, students will not be properly educated. Because when students do not feel excited , their going to everyday school become monotonous . which is harmful to their study. Sometimes students act for not to going school and their mark sheets are very low which is not good for their future . For example, in junior high school of Canada , teachers seen that without creating more entertainment in school , childrens would be less productive.so it is necessary to connect them with enjoyment resources.
In conclusion, I believe that opening huge enjoyment ways in school can help students to be a best learner and become more productive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11698113208 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7761195046 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535849056604 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2487728572 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.08333333333 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241400219139 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108860889933 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351199667975 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157009477256 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511278219806 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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