An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result.Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
IN the above argument author states that, an international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A to combat vitamin A deficiency, among the people in impoverished nation of Tagus. Author also states that farmers will be paid subsidies for farming this new variety of millet. The argument may sound logical and coherent but there are certain holes and assumptions that may lead to failure of the project.
First of all, an international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet in response to vitamin A deficiency. Now, it is nowhere stated in the argument that how many people are deficient of vitamin A. Whether this deficiency is among a certain class of people or the whole nation. For eg, if certain class of people are facing such deficiency, then it would be rather helpful to know the reason behind such deficiency and work on that particular factor which lead to vitamin A deficiency. Also it should be noted that, whether people from Tagus are facing the deficiency in recent times or it is inherent from their ancestors. All these factors should be taken into consideration, before providing measures to combat deficiency.
Author further states that, the nation is impoverished. And since this new breed of millet will cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies. But nowhere in the argument it is given that how much subsidy will be given. Is it a very small amount or total cost is given as subsidy. For eg, if it cost way too much for the farmer, and only 20% is given as subsidy, then farmer is less likely to farm such breed.
Author assumes that millet is already a staple food in Tagus, so people will readily adopt new variety. But no evidence is given which states that the taste of new breed is same as the old one. If this new breed differs a lot from the old breed, the people are less likely to consume such food. Also it is stated that government should do everything to promote this new type of breed. But whether this new type of breed is sufficient to combat vitamin A deficiency is not clearly stated. If this new breed can cover only up to certain percentage of the vitamin A deficiency, then it is not really helpful.
To conclude, author should give further explanations for the assumptions made to make this argument valid. Also , the Organisation should make sure that there is total cooperation with government so that the techniques are properly administered to the farmers .
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 1998 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.668 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.959 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 510, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...tor which lead to vitamin A deficiency. Also it should be noted that, whether people...
^^^^
Line 7, column 296, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e are less likely to consume such food. Also it is stated that government should do ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 553, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ver only up to certain percentage of the vitamin A deficiency, then it is not rea...
^^
Line 9, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... made to make this argument valid. Also , the Organisation should make sure that ...
^^
Line 9, column 261, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...are properly administered to the farmers .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80373831776 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67409098094 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429906542056 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1632258508 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4545454545 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.59090909091 5.70786347227 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501170769334 0.218282227539 230% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151237022771 0.0743258471296 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127530561459 0.0701772020484 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272661925184 0.128457276422 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126690707227 0.0628817314937 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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