An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author claims that the government of Tagus must promote a new type of millet in order to combat vitamin A deficiency. He considers the fact that vitamin A deficiency is prevalent among the people of Tagus and proposes a possible solution that includes planting a new variety of millet that is rich in vitamin A. However, upon careful inspection, it can be observed that the provided evidence gives little credible support to the author's conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered unsubstantiated and flawed.
First of all, the author assumes that this new variety of millet would combat the vitamin A deficiency, but does not provide proper evidence that supports this position. In the first place, he does not explain the intensity of this deficiency among the people of Tagus. For instance, any information that shows more statistics on the existence of vitamin A deficiency such as a detailed survey or medical examination would give a clear picture of whether a measure to combat vitamin A deficiency is required. Further, he has mentioned that this new variety of millet is the only possible solution to combat this deficiency. In this case, there could be several other factors considered to solve this issue. Therefore, the argument would have been more convincing if it could shed more light on this information.
Additionally, the author mentions that this variety of millet is expensive than the existing staple and farmers will be paid subsidies for planting this type of seeds. In its current form, the people of Tagus are already consuming millet as a staple and this new variety of staple would cost more. In the impoverished nation, people might prefer to use millets that cost them less.
However, the author might not necessarily be wrong to assert that this new type of millet would help in combating vitamin A deficiency, it would be better if he could provide strong evidence on whether this would be accepted well among the people of Tagus, then it would lead to a better understanding of the problem at hand. In conclusion, the author's claim is unpersuasive as it stands.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1720 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.654 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.688 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 434, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ce gives little credible support to the authors conclusion. Hence the argument can be c...
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Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ible support to the authors conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered unsubsta...
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Line 3, column 676, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considered solving'.
Suggestion: considered solving
...e, there could be several other factors considered to solve this issue. Therefore, the argument wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98583569405 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73378884065 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461756373938 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7114417126 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5333333333 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396624097551 0.218282227539 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144382086904 0.0743258471296 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0819149866356 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266885900961 0.128457276422 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505119896465 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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