An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In the above argument author says in response to the deficiency of vitamin A among the people in the impoverished nation of tagus a new engineered millet high in vitamin A should be promoted by the government which is flawed in many ways mainly as he or she describes that the solo cure for vitamin A deficiency and we can discuss how it is flawed in the further paragraphs.
Firstly,the author concludes that their is lack of vitamin A deficiency among the people of tagus without any basis.Before directly choosing millet as a cure one should find out what is causing Vitamin A deficiency particularly only in the impoverished nation of tagus. For example their might be lack of salt content in the food consumed by the people of tagus which has resulted in vitamin A deficiency and growing millet would be a complex and mere waste if the deficiency is caused by salt.
Secondly,Even thought if the vitamin A deficiency is caused by lack of intake of millet,there are several substitute or alternate of millet.Why to promote the millet which costs more rather than just
looking for a better alternative which is economical.
In conclusion,government of tagus should analyse what exactly is causing vitamin A deficiency and figure out if the reason is being lack of intake of millet.However,if they find out that the lack of millet is causing the vitamin A deficiency they should discuss substitute for millet which gives the exact benefit as millet rather than just squandering the money in buying costly millet seeds and promoting newly engineered millet seeds.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1285 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.724 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 54.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.647 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.659 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.925 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.353 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ed in the further paragraphs. Firstly,the author concludes that their is lack of ...
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Line 3, column 35, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...s. Firstly,the author concludes that their is lack of vitamin A deficiency among t...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Before
...g the people of tagus without any basis.Before directly choosing millet as a cure one ...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Even
...eficiency is caused by salt. Secondly,Even thought if the vitamin A deficiency is ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...cy is caused by lack of intake of millet,there are several substitute or alternate of ...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun substitute seems to be countable; consider using: 'several substitutes'.
Suggestion: several substitutes
...d by lack of intake of millet,there are several substitute or alternate of millet.Why to promote t...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'alternates'?
Suggestion: alternates
... millet,there are several substitute or alternate of millet.Why to promote the millet whi...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Why
...veral substitute or alternate of millet.Why to promote the millet which costs more ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , government
...ve which is economical. In conclusion,government of tagus should analyse what exactly is...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...eason is being lack of intake of millet.However,if they find out that the lack of mille...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , if
...s being lack of intake of millet.However,if they find out that the lack of millet i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vitamin A deficiency they should discuss substitute for millet which gives the ex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 264.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9696969697 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02900540399 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.8473053892 228% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.8415734632 57.8364921388 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 262.4 119.503703932 220% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.8 23.324526521 226% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.6 5.70786347227 291% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417176788809 0.218282227539 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.253143824832 0.0743258471296 341% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596189296798 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231419751372 0.128457276422 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108649144254 0.0628817314937 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.4 14.3799401198 197% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 18.7 48.3550499002 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 12.197005988 193% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 98.500998004 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.8 11.1389221557 205% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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