Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
In the above passage author claims that the dictum to follow the dreams should be emphasized on picking a worthy goals and also he mention's that many peoples dreams are inherently selfish.However, here author claims are too vague to be considered.Each individual has their own dream and he tries to bring out a difference between worthy and non worthy goals. I strongly disagree to his point of view as dreams come based on ones own interest and cannot be called as selfish. According to me there is nothing called worthy and non worthy goals.
In the recent times, we see many people following their dream and passions.For example, we can consider our miss world 2017 Manushi Chillar, along with being a medical student she went to participate in pageant. If she had chosen to be a doctor she would have had a worthy carrier.But, she followed her dreams and we cant call her dreams to be selfish because she bought INDIA miss world crown after 17 years and made all indian's proud. This example proves against the authors claim that dreams are inherently selfish.
Although, Choosing a worthy carrier may raise your standard of living by providing you sufficient money to earn bread.But, as we human beings should always aim for better quality of life and peace of mind and happiness and these things cannot be bought from the money.by following your dream and becoming a veteran in the field you chose can also increase your standard of living.There is a saying "Your work wont seem like work if you love it".
Hence, people should always use their acuity and instincts to discern their dream and nurture it as it will bring them happiness and raise their quality of living. Dreams are not selfish as we see many luminaries who have followed their dreams and brought Nation a good name.In conclusion, one should always follow their dreams without categorizing them as worthy and non-worthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89814814815 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54511757229 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567901234568 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.499372469 60.3974514979 200% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.333333333 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.0 23.4991977007 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309348811442 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125267749768 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058199339978 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177306102789 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456999083652 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 48.8420337079 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.