An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that there is vitamin A deficiency in Tagus,and the international development organization have engineered a new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A.The author states that, the government should promote this new millet to combat vitamin A deficiency, based on the following assumptions.
The author does not mention the amount of vitamin A present in the old millet and in the new millet. If the numbers/percent of vitamin A vary significantly, then there is a definite need to change to the new millets. But the author does not mention the number/percent thus by weakening the argument.
The farmer will be given subsidies for farming the new millet, but will the subsidies be able to generate the same amount the farmer earned with the old millet, is not mentioned. The argument states that the farmers will have to pay more for the seeds of new millets, but again the prices for the seeds of old and new millet is not stated, thus weakening the argument.
The argument states that the government should promote the new millet to combat vitamin A deficiency, but the author does not state any other means to combat vitamin A deficiency. The author is assuming that there is only one way that has been developed by the international development organization to curb the vitamin A deficiency. The author is not providing other means to combat the deficiency.
The government should take all possible measures to combat the vitamin A deficiency, but should not only promote a single solution. The government should look for other solutions and then come to a conclusion as to what will be the best for the farmers and also what will be the best way to erradicate the vitamin A deficiency.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 297 350
No. of Characters: 1394 1500
No. of Different Words: 106 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.151 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.694 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.637 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 67 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.846 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.463 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.739 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.163 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...t there is vitamin A deficiency in Tagus,and the international development organizat...
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Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ed of millet which is high in vitamin A.The author states that, the government shou...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y, based on the following assumptions. The author does not mention the amount o...
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Line 2, column 4, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...based on the following assumptions. The author does not mention the amount of v...
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Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...llet. If the numbers/percent of vitamin A vary significantly, then there is a definite...
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Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...let. If the numbers/percent of vitamin A vary significantly, then there is a defi...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ercent thus by weakening the argument. The farmer will be given subsidies for f...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t stated, thus weakening the argument. The argument states that the government ...
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Line 4, column 4, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tated, thus weakening the argument. The argument states that the government sho...
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Line 4, column 183, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r means to combat vitamin A deficiency. The author is assuming that there is only o...
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Line 4, column 337, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ation to curb the vitamin A deficiency. The author is not providing other means to ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... other means to combat the deficiency. The government should take all possible ...
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Line 5, column 4, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...her means to combat the deficiency. The government should take all possible mea...
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Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...uld not only promote a single solution. The government should look for other soluti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, then, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 293.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86689419795 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86407711422 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 204.123752495 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.37542662116 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 452.7 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6288084294 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.636363636 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.81818181818 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390079419993 0.218282227539 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156662224594 0.0743258471296 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113522459212 0.0701772020484 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233122736143 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995581027081 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 98.500998004 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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