An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The argument about the government Of Tagus promoting the new breed of millet is a flawed argument because a lot of factors is not taken into consideration and many assumptions have been made without providing sufficient evidence for it.

Firstly, the assumption made is the nation Tagus has no other variety of food that can can help them combat the Vitamin A deficiency. There can be other food products as well which can be excellent sources for removing vitamin A deficiency and the people won't have to opt for expensive breed of engineered millet.

Secondly, no facts are provided based on which the people are being considered vitamin A deficit. It can be possible that in the whole nation only a particular state or region might be deficit. So promoting this new type of millet won't prove advantageous for the entire nation of Tagus. No evidence has been provided whether a survey has been conducted or not, and if conducted then for how many people(since we are talking based on the entire nation), what are the results of survey.

Consequently, the assumption made in the argument that in spite of the engineered millet being expensive people are going to adopt it seems unreasonable. A nation consists of different financial divisions of people from poor to rich and the government is assuming that the poor people are also going to buy this engineered millet. Also, no evidence is provided for how much subsidy will be paid to the farmers and will it be sufficient enough for them or not.

Subsequently, no evidence is provided on why the non-engineered millet can't be grown since millet is already a staple food in Tagus.

More evidence on why the Government has to promote this new type of expensive millet is needed, since non-engineered millet are less expensive and high source of vitamin A.

Therefore, I will like to conclude that more evidence is needed to throw light on the argument, since lack of evidence makes the argument flawed and unconvincing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: would
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 336.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94047619048 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77351412437 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0159443669 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.692307692 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362475947931 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141354058979 0.0743258471296 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780101818563 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178983891409 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752739866437 0.0628817314937 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1613 1500
No. of Different Words: 151 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.703 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.691 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.732 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5