An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be p

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An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The international organization has created a plan to combat vitamin A deficiency in Tagus by promoting a new breed of millet that has a high concentration of vitamin A. While this plan might in fact work, many questions must be answered in order to asses it's success chances.

Firstly, the deficiency's origin must be investigated and the organization must inquire if it is due to a lack of vitamin A in the daily nutrition of Tagus residents, or due to something else. For example, many vitamin deficiencies stem from climate conditions in a country, hygiene traditions and so on. If the vitamin A deficiency is caused by a lack of the vitamin in residents' nutrition, than the organization's plan might succeed, but in any other case, the increase in vitamin A will have no affect whatsoever on the health of residents.

Secondly, the organization admits that the new millet would cost more, and thus it plans to provide subsidies to farmers. In such a way, the organization hopes that the price would not prevent the farmers from growing the new millet. While this is important, the organization did not investigate if the price of the new millet for consumers would be the same as the old breed. The price of a product in a market is not affected only by it's production costs, but also on other factors such as quality compared to other similar products. In the case before us, it seems there is reason to believe that the added quality of the new millet would result in it costing more for consumers than the original millet. If that were the case, many residents would decide to continue purchasing the original millet and therefore would not enjoy the new millet's benefits. Due to this threat, it can be asserted that only if the consumer prices for both millets were the same, or if the organization would subsidize the difference between them, would the organization's attempt be successful.

Lastly, the organization must make sure that the new millet has the same qualities as the previous millet, in all but it's amount of vitamin A. If, for example, the millet would be inferior to the previous brand in taste, or in vitamin C, this might have an effect on the organization's success. In the first case, the bad taste might prevent consumers from purchasing the product, since they would rather enjoy their meal than address their vitamin A deficiency, and in the latter they might rather have enough vitamin C and a vitamin A deficiency than vice versa. Based on these two examples, it becomes clear that only if the organization was able to create a millet that is of same quality as the previous one, except for it's high levels of vitamin A, would the plan to eradicate the vitamin A deficiency be viable.

In conclusion, the organization's plan to fight the vitamin A deficiency in the country of Tragus might in fact succeed, but in order to assess it's success additional questions must be answered.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'organizations'' or 'organization's'?
Suggestion: organizations'; organization's
...min C, this might have an effect on the organizations success. In the first case, the bad tas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, except for, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2425.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79249011858 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76129110269 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.418972332016 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.67365269461 478% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7912721221 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.647058824 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7647058824 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35529207116 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146063187978 0.0743258471296 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796950753498 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211332363676 0.128457276422 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755425569494 0.0628817314937 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 506 350
No. of Characters: 2365 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.743 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.674 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.19 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5